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The Giver rettelse

25. januar 2017 af marcus30301 (Slettet) - Niveau: 7. klasse

jeg har brug for hjælp til at rette den jer tekst.

My name is Asher I don’t have a last name, no one has a last name. I’m living in a perfect community with no anger, I like my family, there is rules like use precise language take your morning medication and never lie. I have 2 friends my best friend Jonas and my good friend Fiona I really look forward to the graduation for ¨the twelve’s¨ the ceromony is led by the Chief Elder, I really hope I get a good job maybe something what could be fun and something I maybe can learn something about I’m normally the guy who is funny and coming up with some jokes and I like to make a game out of anything sometime do I have trouble following the rules perfectly. I’m often late for school but it’s lucky that i’m fast with the apologies. In the community do all forgive me really easy I think they like me, I can just say I’m apologise and they say apologise accepted. At the Ceremony of Twelve, did i assigned to be drone pilot and Jonas is selected to be the new Receiver of Memory, the Receiver of Memory is really special only one got assigned to be the Receiver of Memory and we are not talking about that person, Fiona got assigned to be nurturer. After i got assigned to be drone pilot did i work really hard and i took it really serious, after some time did i take Jonas and Fiona to a high place to show them the drones and to tell them about how it is to be an drone pilot. when i'm flying looking down on everything its it like i'm seeing things for the verry first time and there is these two huge rocks as lean against each other and making a kinda triangle. and Jonas showed us something, something diffent something i never have seen before but it was aggainst the rules and i don't want to break the rules anymore so i walked away. But life in a world where we just do the same things every day we take the morning medicine and go to the job we got assigned to, but i like the world i life in. 

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Svar #1
25. januar 2017 af Justitia

Hvorfor skal den rettes? Det er vel din lærers opgave at påpege eventuelle fejl.


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Svar #2
25. januar 2017 af Justitia

Endvidere så er opgaven spækket med fejl. Jeg er sikker på, hvis du læser den igennem igen (grundigt), så finder du selv nogle af dem. 


Svar #3
25. januar 2017 af marcus30301 (Slettet)

kan du give et eksempel? engelsk er ikke mit stærkeste fag vi får ikke karrekter endnu men vil bare gerne vide hvad jeg gør forkert sådan jeg kan blive bedre


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Svar #4
25. januar 2017 af Justitia

 I like my family, there is rules like use precise language take your morning medication and never lie.


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