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kan i hjælpe med at rette mine gramatiske fejl

03. januar 2010 af hotboyhot (Slettet) - Niveau: 8. klasse

hej her har jeg en engelsk tale. jeg har lavet grammatiske fejl tror jeg men jeg er ikke så god til engelsk grammatik, så jeg har prøvet at rette så meget som jeg kan, jeg kan ikke mere vil i nok hjælpe mig.

Engelsk tale

I can not understand why Chris brown attack me, he attack me because I see his text message on his mobile, I say to him after I had see the text message: you are my unfaithful are it true, and he says yes it is true and he was angry and shout you have not right to look at my mobile and see my text message, and he take my hair and he hit me with his right hand and so began he attack me. My face was red of blood. I loose for his attack and run to bed room, I take my mobile and call to police and so coming the police and take him to police station. I think Chris brown is a psychopath and it is not only I there think he is a psychopath, all my friend and his friend and all my neighbors think also Chris brown is a psychopath, I think he not shall go to jail, but I think he shall go to psychologist and get psychological help because when he not get psychological help will he not be healthy and he will be psychopath to he dead and he will attack other people in the jail and I will not have he attack other people with he attack me because whose he attack other people will he kill other people, but his sentence is he shall in six months of community work. I think it is the same who he goes to jail or he shall in six months of community work, he can also attack other people when he work of community work. It is therefore I think he shall to the closed department, there can he not attack other people. I think how I is married with Chris brown, how be able to see that Chris brown was psychopath, I have say to my lawyer I will be divorce with Chris brown, and he say after 3 day will you be divorce with Chris brown.
 


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04. januar 2010 af frøkendingo (Slettet)

Jeg har ikke rettet det 100% for det er ikke alle sætningerne jeg forstår, men det er ihvertfald bedre end før. (;

I cant understand why Chris Brown attack me, he attack me because I see his text message on his mobile, I say to him after I saw the text message: You are unfaithful to me is it true? He says: "Yes it is true" and he was angry and shouted: "You have not right to look at my mobile and see my text message," and he took my hair and he hit me with his right hand and began he attack me. My face was red of blood. I lost for his attack and ran to the bedroom, I took my mobile and called to the police and then the police came and took him to the police station. I think Chris brown is a psychopath and it is not only I who think he is a psychopath, all my friends and his friends and all my neighbors think also Chris Brown is a psychopath, I dont think he should go to jail, but I think he should go to psychologist and get psychological help because when he not get psychological help will he not be healthy and he will be a psychopath until he die and he will attack other people in the jail and I will dont  want that he attack other people like he attacked me because them he will attack will he kill other people, but his sentence is he shall in six months of community work. I think it is the same if he goes to jail or if he gets  six months of community work, he can also attack other people when he work of community work. It is therefore I think he should go to the closed department, there can he not attack other people. I think how I is married with Chris brown, how be able to see that Chris brown was a psychopath, I have say to my lawyer I will be divorce with Chris brown, and he say after 3 day will you be divorce with Chris brown


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