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HJÆLP!! PLEASE HJÆLP!! ABSTRACT TIL SRP

16. december 2009 af kovalchukr (Slettet) - Niveau: B-niveau

 HEJ ALLE.

Nogen som lige gider at kigge på dette korte abstract og rette det for fejl, sprog osv.

Tak på forhånd!!

This study investigates whether health was distinguishable or not. The purpose was also to find out how huge significance body ideals have been given to identity formation in late modern society. Furthermore, the study also examines that diseases can be linked to the problem of excessive veneration of health ideals. This paper has collected and disseminated the substance by using an analytical and descriptive method, and using a knowledge base identified to describe following. This study discusses whether it has some social costs that society gets more and more sick caused by particular excessive veneration of health ideals. It also discusses whether it is society or the individual's responsibility to take care of the problem. This paper also found out that the diseases of excessive veneration of health ideals have some social costs, and that it is difficult to say whether it is the individual or society's responsibility to take care of the problem. Finally concludes this paper that health is not one concrete definition, since the concept is so broad.


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Svar #1
17. december 2009 af Bombastico (Slettet)

Hej

Følgende ting synes jeg du burde kigge på 

Jeg synes der er mange "this study" this and that, hvor det måske ville gavne dig at kigge på synonymer.

Til sidst i din abstract skriver du også at du diskuterer om hvorvidt det er den enkelte eller samfundet, der skal tage ansvar for problemet, mens at du nævner det igen bagefter. (måske ret det til at stå i en sætning, hvor du bare forlænger med at skrive at det er svært at sige hvem der skal tage ansvaret). 

Desuden lyder "This paper also found out" ikke rigtig, idet en opgave ikke finder ud af det, men måske skulle du overveje at skrive noget i stil med, at du i denne opgave redegører for "this and that" 

Ellers bruger du da nogle gode engelske ord :)


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Svar #2
17. december 2009 af Bombastico (Slettet)

 I mellemtiden burde jeg måske se og komme igang med min egen :P


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