Engelsk stil

devoiced: stavefejl, korrekt stavemåde er "divorced".

my mom and dads work: "dads" (=fædre) er forkert, hvorimod dad's (=tilhørende faderen) er korrekt.

Prøv evt. at slå stavekontrollen til.

Generelt: du skriver meget, som om det er oversat direkte fra dansk til engelsk, f.eks. "But in that case I was very lucky to have the best grandparents in the big great world". Prøv at rive dig løs fra den faste, danske talemåde og skriv noget, der flyder bedre sprogmæssigt, f.eks.: "(...) but even so, I was very lucky to have the best grandparents in the world."

Undgå at overdrive/pynte for meget på sproget (eks.: "the big great world"). Sometimes, less is more.

Du skriver mange hovedsætninger. Skift gerne mellem hovedsætninger og bisætninger - det giver en bedre læserytme, at det hele ikke er sms-sprog.

Håber, du kan bruge mit svar til noget~

tusind tak:) det hjalp meget:)

 "mom" er amerikansk  -   "mum" er engelsk

My grandparents had a farm in Yorkshire. 
I used to come there often before my parents got (devoiced) divorced. It was a beautiful little place where you could forget all about your (thoughts) worries and the stressed(ing) life back home. The most memorable thing about the farm was that it was a place where the time stands still. You could always enjoy your surroundings compared to the city. At home we were always affected by something for example my mom and dads work. They normally always needed to work late. As a seven year old boy it was very hard for me to live without my parents. They said that it was all over soon but it never happened. I was just a child who felt overseen by his own parents. But in that case I was very lucky to have the best grandparents in the big great world. They encouraged and supported me to pursue my own dreams. The farm in Yorkshire was a big part of my childhood it was like a second home for me. It was the place where I learned to ride my first bike. The place where I learned to take responsibility for my own actions. Most important of all the place where I learned that I could do what ever I wanted to do and that nobody had the right to judge me.

My parents promise didn’t become truth. Honestly it got worse and worse. They always fought in the middle of the night. Because they thought that I slept but I wasn’t I could hear it all. They were fighting about me. I used to close my eyes and cry myself to sleep every night. Every morning I hoped that it was all over but my hope shattered when I heard my father’s heavy steps and the silence. One morning everything changed the silence was switched into yelling. After that morning I never saw my dad again. My mom acted like she didn’t even care. A few weeks later we moved away. Away from what I knew.

Glem # 3.

 My grandparents had a farm in Yorkshire. 

I used to come there often before my parents got (devoiced) divorced. It was a beautiful little place where you could forget all (about) your (thoughts) worries and the stressed(ing) life back home. The most memorable thing about the farm was that it was a place where (the) time seemed to stand(s) still. You could always enjoy your surroundings, (compared to) which was not possible in the city. At home we were always affected by something for example my (mom) mum and (dads) dad's work (havde de det samme arbejde?). They (normally) always needed to work late. As a seven year old boy it was very hard for me to live without my parents. They said that it was all over soon but (it never happened) that was never the case. I was just a child who felt he was (overseen) ignored/neglected by his own parents. (But in that case) I was, however,  very lucky to have the best grandparents in the (big great) world. They (encouraged  and) supported me and encouraged me to pursue my own dreams. The farm in Yorkshire was a big part of my childhood, and  it was like a second home (for) to me. It was the place where I learnt(ed) to ride my first bike. The place where I learnt(ed) to take responsibility for my own actions. Most important of all, it was the place where I learnt(ed) that I could do what ever I wanted (to do) and that nobody had the right to judge me.

My (parents) parents' (promise didn’t become truth) was never fulfilled. Honestly it got worse and worse. They were always (fought) arguing/quarelling in the middle of the night. (Because t)They thought that I (slept) was asleep, but I wasn’t and I could hear it all. They were (fighting about) quarelling over me. I used to close my eyes and cry myself to sleep every night. Every morning I hoped that it was all over, but my hope was shattered when I heard my father’s heavy steps and the silence. One morning everything changed when  the silence was (switched) turned  into yelling. After that morning I never saw my dad again. My (mom) mum acted (like) as if she didn’t even care. A few weeks later we moved away. (Away) Apart from what I knew....................???.

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"mum" er engelsk,  "mom" er amerikansk.

"as if" er engelsk, "like" er amerikansk

 Brug de gode råd fra linarh23 !

Brug "mother" og ikke mom, da "mom" er uformelt.

 å va så ?

 bruger 6,

I andet afsnits første linje, skriv  "Honestly  things got worse........."