Oversættelse, ordstilling

Heeej! jeg har en oversættelse som er en øvelse i ordstilling.. Det ville være dejligt hvis der lige var nogen som ville rette den for fejl!

Øvelse 7: oversæt
Joan kom løbende ind i klasselokalet.
”skynd dig George,” råbte hun. ”Der er sket et bankrøveri. Der er politi med hund og alt muligt, og der kom også en ambulance.”
”Tag det roligt,” sagde George. ”Hvordan ved du, at der er et bankrøveri??”
”Der sker jo så meget nu om dage,” fortsatte han.” Måske er det nogle, der optager en film.”
Joan indrømmede, at hun ikke vidste præcist, hvad der var sket.
”Men der var mindst ti betjente,” sagde hun ivrigt. ”Hvis der ikke var sket noget, ville der vel ikke være så meget politiet?”
George kunne godt se, at hun havde ret. ”Hvis det er et bankrøveri,” sagde han, ”bliver min bedstefar ked af det. han har alle sine penge i banken, og hvis der sker noget med dem, ved jeg ikke, hvad han gør.”
Næste dag i avisen læste de, at der faktisk var blevet begået et bankrøveri, men da der ikke var nogen, der havde set røvernes bil var politiet uden spor.
Heldigvis havde Georges bedstefar flyttet sine penge til en anden bank ugen før. Senere sagde den gamle mand, at han havde haft på fornemmelse, at der kunne ske noget med hans sparepenge, og han havde derfor flyttet dem, men George mente, at hans bedstefar havde sat pengene ind i den nye bank, fordi han kunne få en højere rente der.

Øvelse 7
Joan was running into the classroom.
“Hurry George,” she was shouting. “A bank robbery had happened. There are police with dogs and everything and there is also an ambulance.”
“Take it easy,” said George. “How do you know that there is a bank robbery?”
“A lot is happing now at days,” he continued. “Maybe somebody is shooting a film.”
Joan confessed that she didn’t exactly know what was happened. “But there was at least ten policemen,” she said eagerly. “If there wasn’t happened something there wouldn’t be so many police?”
George could see that she was right. “If it’s a bank robbery,” he said, “my grandfather is going to be sad. All his money is in the bank and if something is happened with them I don’t know what he is going to do.”
The next day had they read that there actually had been a bank robbery but there wasn’t anybody who had seen the robber’s car so the police was without traces.
His grandfather has fortunately moved his money to another bank last week. The old man had later said he had a feeling that something could happened to his savings, and he had therefor transferred them but George mean the his grandfather had put his money in the new bank because he could have a higher interest rate.

Generelt har jeg især problemer med tiderne (nutid og datid) på engelsk.

På forhånd TAAAAK!