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Jeg har lavet en engelsk oversættelse af en dansk tekst. Jeg synes altid jeg får en masse fejl, når jeg har lavet en aflevering, og ville gerne denne gang prøve at sende en god en. Jeg har læst den igennem et par gange, men synes ikke rigtig jeg kan finde flere fejl. Er der en venlig sjæl derude, som kunne tænke sig at læse den igennem, og se på eventuelle manglere? :-)

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Rosa L. Parks was 40 years old, when she one day in 1955 sat down in the back of the bus in Montgomery on her way home, from one days hard work, as a machinist in one of Alabama’s textile factory. At the next bus stop a white man came down through the aisle of the bus, which was filling with travelers. The local laws required at the time – in 1955 – not alone that the black had to sit in the back, but also that a Negro had to stand up if a white demanded the seat. It was what now happened. The little black woman looked up. “No” she said. The bus driver interfered himself with the authority in the case and demanded the same. “No” Rosa L. Parks said. When the two policemen from the police force of Montgomery showed up at the place, they put her in handcuffs, took her to the police station, put
her in jail and fined her at last with 10 dollars. “No” Rosa L. Parks said. Her stubborn and repeated no released 381 days of boycott by the black of the busses of Montgomery, which in the end was about to go bankruptcy. Her case was sent through the administration of justice, until the Supreme Court gave her the 10 dollars back. It brought until that an unknown black priest in the town, a certain Martin Luther King, out in the front row of the fight of the citizenship. Rosa L. Parks was absolutely aware what she had done and had decided that it was the only way she could demonstrate that she wouldn’t put up with to be treated like an outcast after the race lows degraded rules. She was in other words activist, after the conditions of the time. If you study the conditions closer, you see that the bus boycotts also was started in the southern states, before Rosa L. Parks refused to stand up, and that there was considerable concern, before pastor Martin Luther King became known in Montgomery. But of course it is historically correct that is was her stubbornness, who released the first demonstration in real size, exactly the economic draining of the bus company, like this Martin Luther King started his running track as civil rights leader, that running track which should be ended with the shot in Memphis thirteen years later. Martin Luther King was appointed to lead the boycott against the busses and when he was arrested that year – the first of 15 times – he said: “Even though we are being arrested every day, even though we are being abused every day, even though we are being trampled on every day, do never let any pull you so far down that you will hate them. In Detroit where Rosa L. Parks now live, there are formed a committee, which will make sure that Rosa’s deed will not be forgotten and the committee has got a street though the city’s black neighborhood named Rosa Parks Bouldevard. The committee has gathered one million kroner to a nursing home on the Boulevard which will also be housing Rosa Parks, which husband died some years ago. If the money can be gathered declares she, she won’t say no this time.