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Hej.. ville blive rigtig glad, hvis nogen som var gode til engelsk gad sige til mig hva der er forkert i de her sætninger.. da jeg ikk er så god.

Miranda is in a very difficult situation. The choice to be an adult when you are only 18 is not everyone there can manage it. The parents support her, but the boyfriend gets a feeling of regret. How can young girls like Miranda say that they are ready to leave all the things you might have when you are in this age?
The story wanted us to see how difficult it can be when you are young, and how fast the whole world can chance, and in this story its happened for Miranda, when she gets pregnant whit her boyfriend. There are many things she needs to think on, like how important it is to get an education.
The question can may be what Marisa can lose, and how will all her love feelings influence her choice. Is Michael ready for chance his life so much, do he love her enough to take the choice?
The analysis will focus on the youth may be today, how difficult it can be when things happened when they are not arranged.