gidre' du?

hej..
er der nogen der kan og gidre at hjælpe mig med at rette min opgave, for der nogen fejl hvor jeg har svært ved at se...på forhånd tak :)

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To what extent people are free to choose their own lives? It is an important question.
We living in a world, where people can very fast and easy get information on the hole world plan, about every thing they do not hear about before, with the many and effective Medias. It give their life knew outlook; it could be a positive or negative look.
Earlier in the history, people did not have the same opportunity to choice a different way of living.
They were commit oneself too the tradition and religion, and could not get a different way of living, or new lifestyle.
Today people are much more “open mind” and “free”, especially the young people because they are more individualistic and are not grip by the traditional authority and religion like earlier in the history.
In a country were democracy exists, they are many different groups and majority which people are more open for it. If they didn’t like their way of living, they accept their style because the other have accept the others style too.
If a person for example chooses to join a group with a new lifestyle and maybe politic, the family and friends will not be very happy for it and maybe rejected. But it will never be a surprise for anyone, because today we all are free to choose a different and specially life in a wide extent.
When the extent people are free to choose their own lives are extensive and large, than we have to talking about the consequences, because people choose may not annoy the society and actually not hurt the person who choose one’s life.