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kan du ik' copu/paste den?
så vil jeg godt hurtigt kig på den efter de værste fejl.

Compared to other causes such as road accidents, suicide, drugs and alcohol, smoking kills 6 times more. Or to be more precisely it kills 100.000 people alone in Britain, every year. This is a really extensive global issue, which results in many people’s health. Another issue which is caused by this still growing issue is money. The cost of smoking is high in terms of people's health, but it also involves a lot of economic. Smoking is estimated to cost over one billion per year! A lot of people have tried to reduce smoking, by contributing to demonstrations, but none have succeeded. Success has been limited. I know that former efforts have contributed to reduce the number of smokers, but the result is not satisfying. Why don´t we individuals care about our body? There is no doubt that this global issue will result in many individual´s live. A chain of new cigarette commercials will most likely appear, and aware us about this deadly poison. The dependence of this poison is, not always that simple to let go off. Why reduce your live and miss the happy moments in your live, with your family for example? Is it worth is? It will affect most of the smokers, negatively, in my opinion. They will get a guilty conscience, but will at the same time have complications, stopping smoking, because of their dependence. We should not expose us for any more danger, at any rate. We should appreciate the life that god has given us. Why wear down your health? So next time you want to have cigarette, think twice!

Tobacco companies’ manner of persuading others into smoking is in my opinion, “shifty”! They mainly focus on youngsters, and are trying to persuade young people to take up smoking. The main reason for this is that Young smokers represent the major opportunity group for the cigarette industries, which means, that cigarette industries are determining their attitudes to smoking and health and how this might change over time. With other words, they simply observe the youngster, and their way of thinking. This in my opinion manipulation, and should not be allowed. The industries, are poisoning, youngsters, that haven´t the ability to determine, if it´s good or not. Their brain has not developed yet. I can now conclude that cigarette industries are emphasising on youngster. The median age of smokers who start smoking, is typically 16 to 17. And with so many smokers dying or quitting, the industry must replace 3,000 former smokers each day just to maintain its customer base.

The text indicates that they have succeeded. Younger smokers are appearing, by the age of 20 people are already divided into smokers and non-smokers. As I mentioned in the previous section, they start smoking by the age 16 and 17. Concerning the tobacco industries, I have to conclude that they unfortunately have succeeded, because of the increasing numbers of smokers,

In some cases they don´t decide, for them self, but their circle of acquaintances does. Like I mentioned, previously, youngsters are more likely inclined to new offers. A large number of youngsters want to extend their limits, which in some cases results in some bad choices. Smoking is one of them. After thorough consideration, I have reached another option. Group pressure! As the two words indicate, friends simply pressure them. The last option and in my opinion the most widespread is smoking because of image! Youngsters want to make an image, so they appear more grown up.

As for me, I am not interested in poisoning myself. I appreciate life to much, and cannot make myself abuse it. Why smoke? I seriously don´t understand this! Why make an image, and pretend being a person, that you aren´t. Becoming a victim for group pressure, is also not an excuse. How can you be so disposed for group pressure? I don´t believe, that the source of this increasing poison consume is group pressure. All what you need to say is one word, NO! To smoke or not to smoke is only a decision that YOU can make. And I have made a decision!

Advertising can´t be avoided, that is a fact! As I declared, YOU and only YOU can make the decision, and not an advertisement. If you want smoke and reduce your life, then go on! As for the advertising, my posture is “okay”. They don´t influence you to smoke, but you do! Therefore, my answer is YES they should be allowed to advertise!

I seriously do not understand individuals, who are willing to give up life just because of some smoke. Is life not the most valuable thing we posses? It is not worth giving up on life for some smoke. We individuals have to see life from a philosophical perspective, so we can understand the meaning of life.

god ide at indsøtte såkaldte parentes kommaer om unødvendig inskudt information.
eks:
"Another issue, which is caused by this still growing issue, is money."

"The cost of smoking is high in terms of people's health, but it also involves a lot of economic."
economic kan ikke stå alene. Det skal beskrive et eller andet. Eks. "economic problems..."
Måske bruge "economy" i stedet for

en anden ting, hva' mener du med: "There is no doubt that this global issue will result in many individual´s live."

Result?

"...and aware us about this deadly poison."
rettet: "...and make us aware of this deadly poison."

"dependence" til "addiction"

"that haven´t the ability to determine"
talesprog
"that do not have the ability to determine"

"This is in my opinion manipulation"

"...conclude that cigarette industries..."
til:"...conclude that the cigarette industry..."

"The median age of smokers who start smoking"
mener du medianen? eller gennemsnittet?

"my posture is..."
til: "my stand is..."

Har ikke rettet alle fejl, men taget nogle af de væsenligste. (ik fordi der var ret mange af dem)
har heller ik kigget på indhold.

husk i en engelsk stil må du ikke trække sammen til don't osv. der skal stå do not