Hjælp det haster!!

Hej, jeg er igang med en engelsk stil, har skrevet den men den ser mega forkert ud :/ ? Den er heller ikke helt færdig ... men nogen der gider at tjekke den efter fejl ? Den er til imorgen please ...
Her er den:
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I was sitting home with my family when a flash news coming out in the TV.
“Welcome to CNN News we have a flash New, Fears are mounting for the 150 passebgers and crew of an airliner which is thougt to have crashed in the impenetrable jungles of Burma. The Alpha Airways was on a regular flight from Rangoon to Singapore, when the pilot reported that a fire in one engine, there was no further radio contact and ir is feared that the plane was forced to try to land in the jungle. In this remote and inhospitable area there is thought to be little chance of anyone surving a crash.”
I’m a reporter but i don’t even heart something about this crashing before. I can’t believe it, it’s a mirakel if there is somebody who is alive. I must find some other details about it. If i Interview them I got a splendid career. I’ll be the greatest reporter who ever has been known.
But I don’t really find some other realistically facts.
6 days after I was sitting in a café with some friends. We could hear some sounds which called “HELP, HELP PLEASE!!”
We get out to see what it was.
it was 6 persons who’s clothes were crack up, they look like 6 survivors. We call the police and the ambulance, prior to they came i try to ask them some questions about what the problem was and who they was.
They was the 6 alive persons from the crash in the jungle!
I couldt believe it, where was they coming from? How do they still be alive with don’t eat or drink something. It was unbelievable! They was in bad repair so they could’t answer my questions i’ll ask them. All 6 was examine of a doktor to sucure that they was safely. Jelina and Michael should hospitalized because they was’nt intact. Fortunately the 4 others had it fine.
I spoke a bit with the others, they said, that they were fighting to find food and water to survive, they couldn’t share with the rest, in that moment they were just thinking about them selves - it was between life and death.
There was one between them who get my attention 100 % namely, the little girl, Sarah, she was 10 years old, both her father, mother and brother were dying in the crash. She was still in chock, she could’nt foresee what was going on. She was too little, there was a sentence she allways used namely, “Where is my mother, father and brother, i miss them i want to be together with them”
“But there was nothing to do, they was dead, she must realize it” I say to my self.
I still think that it is beyond description unbelievable that they still was alive, and how they could (klare) them selves.
There was a man who said that there was several injured, they agreed that they must split up into two groups, so they could have a chance to find out from the jungle! So everything is pointing to that we must find the other survivors, prior to they dying...
Now the problem was, how we find the others. I call the police and we told them all was happening, they send a helicopter to look into the jungle to find the others. According to Peter (one of the survivors) consist the other group essentially of 7 persons, but we wasnt sure that all of them was alive. The helicopter was still look for the survivors but there was no sign of them!
Finally one day after they was found!