'oppustet'

Jeg har skrevet en mindre stil (dene r ikke helt færdig endnu) på 1,5 side (i stor skrift).

Indtilvidere fylder den alt for meget i forholdt til, hvad jeg stadig har tænkt mig at putte i den. Jeg synes selv den indeholder mange 'tomme ord' og knudrede sætninger. Det ville være så dejligt, hvis en af jer, ville kigge på den og gerne fikse den bedst muligt.

Jeg har selv forsøgt bedst muligt, men lige nu sidder jeg bare og stirre mig selv blind på den. 

Her kommer lidt af den og hvis nogen af jer venlige sjæle derude, skulle have mod på resten, kan jeg jo bare 'maile' dem i en besked herinde. Jeg vil ikke sætte hele teksten ind her, da de måske virker en smule for uoverskueligt.

Her kommer den:

  This fascination of the Whaler is quit interesting and incredibly essential in this story. The Whaler is figured as this hero-like role model for smaller boys and he is described as this strong, brave idol and as the significance of male identity. But this fascination fades more and more trough the story, where the Whaler reveals the lie of his life plus his affaire with the boy’s second role model, his teacher Mrs. Early. To be told about those two things matters really shocks the boy. He has now learned the ‘truth’ of life, you may say. By that he will be entrusted these two terrible lies, grows his consciousness and thus he also comes a step closer to the 'adult life', real life. And we are shown, in several symbolic ways that the narrator is losing its fascination and respect of The Whale. Every time they stand up, and the narrator hopes to be able to leave, the narrator is standing higher and higher, at the end higher that The Whale and it shows how the narrator looks more and more 'down' on him. And furthermore, the first time the narrator meets his great idol, the Whaler is sitting defeating. It’s not a very nice thing to observe and he may fell a bit insulted by seeing that. He learns that nobody is faultless, not even those you trust mostly. Those who seem most perfect are perchance those who are least. The narrator becomes disappointed and baffled over what he is told. He loses the faith in his two great role models in life. It is maybe a harsh way for the young boy to learn it on, but with these two secrets he actually learns a lot about life and human values.