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Hej Ziggy1

Har lige kigget den hurtigt igennem, og dette var, hvad jeg umiddelbart kunne finde. Her er rettelserne:

Fatima is a 16-year-old Muslim girl, who lives with her religious family, who are Turkish immigrants and live in a block of flats in Melbourne, Australia. Her mother Semra’s job is to make purses for a Greek businessman, where tourists come and buy some good things as a memory for visiting and being in Australia. Her two younger sisters: Melec, 9 and Nilgun, 12 help making the purses. Semra cuts out the shape of Australia in fake kangaroo skin, while her daughters stick these onto some plastic purse covers with glue, and Fatima’s job is to fill them up with tissue paper and sew in the zip. Fatimas father is a strict and religious man with no sense of humor! For example when he arrives from work Semra, who's got a huge respect for her husband, immediately goes to the living room and clears a seat to him, and quickly Atilas gets his coffee and slippers. Today Atalia’s sister is coming with her son. Fatima definitely hates her aunt, and is not so pleased to see her coming. She almost detests her. Atila allows Fatima to go out with the weeping baby for a while, but only for a while, and to get some fresh air. She takes a pram, and goes out. On the street she bumps straight into Saret, an Asian boy, who works in a laundry. They begin to talk, but she is so scared that someone should see her with a boy (the Asian boy)!! It seems like they have a really good relationship, and like each other a bit. began to discuss. (Forstår ikke lige dette) When Fatima goes out in the kitchen to get more coffee to the aunt. Her father tells her they talk about her going to Turkey to meet Ali’s son. But Fatima doesn’t want to, and is very angry with them. They don’t know the way things are in Australia, and sometimes it seems as though they are living in different worlds: Fatima in the modern and her father and the aunt in the opposing one. But her mother supports her. She does not want them to have a life as herself, because she regrets it now. She wants her kids to have a better life than hers. And it ends with her aunt saying that she should quit the school. Her reason is that you can not learn how to cook, clean, manage the house and take care of babies, and things like that… Fatima goes into her bedroom, and hears her mother closing the door in the living room.
 

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 Fatima a 16 year old Muslim girl, (she)  lives with her religious family, (which) who are Turkish immigrants (who live) living in a block of flats in Melbourne Australia. Her mother Semra’s job is to make purses for a Greek businessman, (where) who tourists come to see and buy some good things from (as a memory for visiting and being) in memory of their visit to Australia. Her two younger sisters; Melec 9 and Nilgun 12, help(s) making the purses. Semra cuts out the shape of Australia in fake kangaroo skin(,) while her daughters stick these onto some plastic purse covered(s) with glue, and Fatima’s job was to fill them up with tissue paper and sew in the zip. Fatimas father, a strict and religious man with no sense of humour! For example when he arrives from work, Semra (that got) who has (a) huge respect for her husband, immediately went to the living room and cleared a seat (to) for him, and quickly got Atila's (his) coffee and slippers. Today Atalia’s sister (where) was coming with her son. Fatima definitely hated her aunt, and was not so pleased to see(r) her coming, but almost detests her. Atila allows Fatima to go out with the weeping baby for a while, but only for a while, and to get some fresh air. She took a pram, and went out. On the street she bumped straight into Saret, an Asian boy, who works in a laundry. They began to talk, but she was so scared (if) that someone would see her, with a boy (the Asian boy)!! It (seemed like) looked as if they had a really good relationship, and that they liked each other a bit.They began to discuss. When Fatima went out in the kitchen to get more coffee (to) for the aunt, her father told her, they where talking about her to go to Turkey to meet Ali’s son. But Fatima didn’t want to, and was very angry (at) with them. They didn’t (knew) know the way things were in Australia, and sometimes it seemed as though they were living in different worlds (Fatima in the modern) her father and her aunt, in the opposite (opposing one) . But her mother supported her, and she did not want them to have a life as her (self) own, because you could se her she regretting it now, she wanted her kids to have a better life than hers. And it ended with her aunt (said) saying that she should quit (the) school, her reason was that; you could not learn how to cook, clean, manage the house and take care of babies ,something like that… Fatima did go into her bedroom, and heard her mother close(ing) the door in the living room. 

tak skal i have,