Oversættelse

Hej...

Jeg har oversat følgende tekst fra dansk til engelsk, men er usikker på om den er rigtig oversat. Det ville derfor være dejligt hvis nogen gad hjælpe mig. :)

Tideligere drømte de fleste afgangselever om at få et "rigtigt arbejde", når de forlod skolen. Sådan er det ikke mere. Nu ønsker mange unge at starte deres egen virksomhed, da de ser det som en mulighed for at tjene penge, samtidig med at de har deres frihed. Der er dog mange forhindringer for unge iværksættere både personligt og økonomisk, men heldigvis er der også steder, hvor man kan få hjælp.

Min oversættelse:

Most of the people, who are living school where earlier dreaming about getting “a real job”, as soon as they live school. But it is different now. Today many young people want to be self-employers, because they believe it is a good possibility for earning a lot of money and have more free time. Unfortunately do young people have many personally and economical obstacles fortunately are there places for young people to find help. Shell Livewire have for example advised about 200.000 young entrepreneurs counselling in Great Britain. Livewires success have now developed to establish of Livewire International, as today are in 12 countries all over the world.