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Engelsk:
When he turned the car into the street where he lived, it had become dark. The streetlamps were trying in vain to disperse (spread) the darkness. Usually the street was deserted, but now he noticed a bunch of people stood on the sidewalk in front of the park and stared at the houses on the other side. The firefighters were there - and his eye now caught the thick smoke. There were flames - - -

Engelsk:
Mrs. Glade had said that she was afraid of a crack in the chimney. She had intention to contact a man. Mr. Morton felt the sweat on his forehead. Had he not promised to repair the damage himself? He had forgotten it.

 Dansk:
Det betød noget for firmaet, og det ville også betyde noget for ham selv. Det afhang af hans chef. Sæt, at det var tomme løfter! Handling var bedre.

Engelsk:
It meant something for the company and it would also mean something for himself. It depended on his boss. What if it was empty promises! Action was better.

Dansk:
Da han drejede vognen ind i den gade, hvor han boede, var det blevet mørkt. Gadelygterne prøvede forgæves at sprede mørket. Som regel var gaden øde, men nu opdagede han, at en mængde mennesker stod på fortovet foran parken og stirrede på husene på den anden side. Brandsprøjterne var der - og nu fangede hans blik den tykke røg. Der var flammer - - -

Engelsk:
When he turned the car into the street where he lived, it had become dark. The streetlamps were trying in vain to disperse (spread) the darkness. Usually the street was deserted, but now he discovered that an amount of people stood on the sidewalk in front of the park and stared at the houses on the other side. The fire engines were there - and now the thick smoke caught his eye. There were flames - - -

Dansk:
Mrs. Glade havde sagt, at hun var bange for en revne i skorstenen. Hun havde tænkt på at sende bud efter en mand. Mr. Morton mærkede sveden på sin pande. Havde han ikke selv lovet at reparere skaden? han havde glemt det.

Engelsk:
Mrs Glade had said that she was afraid of a crack in the chimney. She had intended to send for someone . Mr. Morton felt the sweat on his forehead. Had he not himself promised to repair the damage? He had forgotten it.

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Eventuel kritik kunne være, at du indimellem oversætter lidt for ordret. Dansk kommer nogen gange i vejen for den engelske grammatik, selv om de på mange måder ligner hinanden. 

 Tusinde tak! Er glad for kritikken. Den vil jeg tage til mig! Jeg vil kigge mine sætninger igennem for fejlen. 
Tak tak!