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Pauline Tuckers tragiske cocktail

En cocktail af drinks og piller dræbte sandsynligvis popstjernen Mick Tuckers kone Pauline.
Hun blev fundet fuldstændig livløs af Mick kort før midnat, efter at hun tidligere på aftenen havde drukket spiritus og taget piller.
Mens Pauline lå døende, sov hendes to-årige datter fredeligt i værelset ved siden af.
Pauline havde ofte lovet Mick, at hun, når hun var kommet over sin nuværende krise, virkelig ville prøve at opgive whiskyen og de beroligende midler.
Mick havde somme tider været meget bekymret over sin kones drikkeri; men han havde altid været sikker på, at de i fællesskab bestemt ville kunne klare dette problem.
Paulines læge fortalte ligsynsmanden, at hun i halvandet år havde lidt alvorligt af depressioner. Hun plejede at drikke hver aften, og tit tog hun også piller. Hendes dømmekraft var som regel stærkt påvirket af denne tragiske cocktail. Ligsynsmanden besluttede, at man i betragtning af det store antal tomme pilleglas og whiskyflasker, der var blevet fundet i huset, kun kunne nå til én kendelse: Død som følge af ulykkestilfælde

Pauline Tuckers tragic cocktail

A cocktail of drinks and pills probably killed the popstar Mick Tucker’s wife Pauline. She was found by Mick totally lifeless shortly before midnight, after she had been drinking alcohol and eaten pills. While Pauline layed dying, her two year old daughter slept peacefully in the room next door.
Pauline had often promised Mick, that when she overcame her present crisis she really would try to quit the whiskey and the sedative drugs.
Now and then Mick had been very worried about his wife’s drinking problem; but he had always been sure that they would definately be able of dealing with this problem together.
Pauline’s doctor told the coroner that for the last 1½ years she had been suffering from serious depressions. She used to drink every night, and often she ate pills as well. Her discernment was usually strongly affected by this tragic cocktail.
The coroner decided that considering the large number of empty pill glasses and whisky bottles that were found in the house only could have one verdict: death as following by …