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Once upon a time in a magical place, far from anywhere you know, lived a tyrant called Shahai. Shahai was a very brutal man, and he was known to be one of the biggest battle heroes. He conquered many countries, but he did not look out for that, which he conquered. He conquered a little village, and in that village lived a boy named Shijiu. Shijiu's dad was a magician - a good one. He knew how to control his kingdom. The only thing, which he has to do, was to kill Shahai. He came up with an idea - and that idea was to make a bird fly through the sky to the castle of the evil tyrant Shahai. That bird needed to collect some of Shahai's hair, because Shijiu's father needed it in order to kill him. Shahai noticed it, and then he knew that something was wrong. At that moment, he called the best of dark magicians to his kingdom. They knew what Shijiu’s father was up to. The tyrant paid them with mountains of gold and silver for them to kill him, and they accepted the offer. The thing, which they did was actually very simple - They used the hair to kill him, and they succeeded.

Der er en del fejl, og det her er mit eget bud på en rettelse. Der er dog ikke nogen begrundelser, og det undrer mig også, hvis din lærer heller ikke har givet dig nogle - det er den bedste måde, man kan lære af sine fejl. Jeg håber alligevel, du kan bruge det til en smule