Hurtig rettelse :)

 Du skal tjekke din til for kongruensfejl, da jeg kan se at du har mange af dem. Fx" but later on we move to USA and stays there till the end" . Her skal det væres "stay" og ikke "stays".

Desuden skal du ikke bruge sammentrækninger af ord, som "doesn't" - det er uformelt.

taak, hvis jeg lige hurtig tjekker den igennem igen for de ting du har skrevet, vil du så være sød at rette den ? :) altså hvis du da stadig er på om en halv time?

 Jeg kan lige ridse de fejl op jeg ser:

The place of action starts in India,(det lyder helt forkert, ved ikke helt hvad jeg kan skrive istedet? nogle ideer?) but later on we move to USA and stays there till the end. For Sumita India is this whole safety point, because she got her friends who she have known her whole life. The environment in USA is new, people speak different, people look different, and things are just different. And that could maybe be a little harsh for an Indian girl in the states. I think the atmosphere changes when she moves to USA, but it’s hard to say what it is. It just feels different.
Sumita is not very old I guess, around the twenties, she comes from India where she lives with her family which she has a nice(ordvalg) relationship with. She doesn’t really have a job besides cooking and washing. She isn’t educated in anything and she only speaks Indian. In the whole story I think that Through the story, Sumitas character and personality changes, in the start she is very depended of other people, but as the story goes on and nearly comes to the end she is a grown and responsible woman in her best age. In the beginning she is living all Indian. She is following the Indian rules and she is wearing the traditional Indian clothes, called Saris. She’s afraid that, when she moves to America she will lose her Indian roots, and that she will never see her family again.
We hear in the last part of the story that she takes ordinary USA clothes on, she would rather be an American girl than an Indian girl. She wants to wear the same clothes as the American people, and she wants to stay in America.. And I think that’s the sign that she has changed from the Indian girl she was to the new woman who lives in USA. And after her husband’s death, she decides to take over the shop and stay in USA.
In the end of the story When Sumita is wearing the American clothes she feels American, and begins getting dreams of her own. Dreams she wasn’t allowed to have, when she was just an Indian girl, because it was not the Indian way. The Indians believed that a wife belonged to her husband and her in-laws.

Mange steder er der også underlige sætninger - læs det igennem igen og tænk lige over om det lyder engelsk. Dem jeg har markeret med fed er fejl i form af kongrusens, sammetrækninger eller ting som virker underligt formuleret. 

heej jeg har lige hurtig rettet så godt som jeg kan håber du vil kigge den igennem.. har sendt den til dig (i indbakken her på studieportalen) :)