Stil retning

Hej! 

Har skrevet denne stil, den må ikke være særlig meget længere, men ville høre om der var nogle der kunne se nogle fejl? Den skal sendes inden i aften, så i må meget gerne svare hurtigt! :-D Håber i vil tage jer tiden til at læse det.

//Helena

- She ran. Are there someone after her? No. There is so dark. She cried a lot and it's raining. Her clothes is so wet, that she consider to take it all of. She lost one of her shoes, when she run round the first corner. Now she sat there, and waiting for the next train. She want to go over to her sister. It have been a bad evening.
It’s all began in the house. She got home from a very stressful work day at 7 O’Clock. She went up to the bedroom, and found hers boyfriend. But not only him. There were also a woman. They have sex. “ Cindy, wait! I can explain. Its not what you think!”, screamt Cindy's boyfriend, Alex. “What the hell are you doing Alex! Who is this?” say Cindy when she went over to the woman, and take in her arm. “I'm so sorry Cindy, give me 5 minutes to explain this. I promise, its not what it looks like”. Cindy didn’t want to hear about it, she just want to get away from it all. Cindy began to cried, and shout at her boyfriend. “What have i ever done to you?” say Cindy. It were very difficult to say something, she is in chok. His own boyfriend? She don’t want to believe it. But unfortunately its true. Cindy ran down to the train station. There was 2 km. She could have chosen to take the car, but she was so upset and disappointed that she did not have time to take the car, she just want to get away.. Away from everything and absolutely away from her boyfriend. Now she sits there at the train station, waiting for the next train to Manchester. She goes home to her sister, to talk about the things there happened and consider her and Alex's relationship. She don’t deserve this. Why her?