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Den danske:

Stanley kom i tanke om at der ingen kaffe var i huset, og heller ingen mælk. Han måtte have kaffe, så han var nødt til at gå ud. Men turde han? Ville de stå nedenfor, eller var de stadig på hospitalet ved deres kammerats seng? ”Hvad nu hvis” fyren døde?
Han prøvede at tage sig sammen, gik ud i badeværelset og tog sig et hurtigt styrtebad; han havde svedt meget. Han tog en ren skjorte på og redte sit hår. Så forlod han lejligheden. Der var ingen ”boldspillere” ”på” gaden, og heller ikke andre ”der” viste nogen interesse for ham.


Den engelske:

It occurred to Stanley that there was no coffee in the house, and neither any milk. He had to get coffee, so he had to get out. But dared he? Would they stay below, or were they constant in the hospital at their friend´s bed? “What now if” the guy died?
He tried to pull himself together, went out to the bathroom and took himself a quickly shower; he had sweated a lot. He put on a clean shirt, and combed his hair. Then he left the flat. There were no “ballplayers” “on” the street, and neither other “who” showed any interest for him.