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Billie is not like Lady Gaga or Britney, she is a real singer, she sings from the Soul, and not just “sing to sing” like other singers. She is her own. She sings to express something
everyone knows (it) but don’t really talk about (it), but she does it, because she knows it. She sings with her experience for her live.

Summary:
The story is about a girl who quickly becomes an adult, because she lives a tough life. Then you’re poor you grow up fast.The queen of jazz, Billie Holiday, spent much of her childhood in Baltimore. Her mother was only a teenager when she had her, 13 years old.. Her musician father left the family early, and her mother wasn’t able to keep her close, which resulted in Billie. Often she was put in care or relatives who abused her. She was raped first time at age 11.
She moved to New York, where she worked as a maid and then was a teenager prostitute. She began singing in Bars and restaurants. She sang body and soul and brought the audience to tears. After some years she was called, by a man from a morgue in Dallas Texas, who said that her father was dead. He died of pneumonia, because no hospital in Texas wouldn’t take in a black man, so he walked from hospital to hospital and then he finally get into Jim Crow in a veterans hospital, but it was to lake. He had hemorrhage so that didn’t made it easier to survive, and he died there in the hospital.
Her life was wound on wound.

? I want to tell about the difference between Billie and a normal teenager.
Billie lives a hard live and experiencing some rough stuff as a kid, and she get thrown around. She lives a very poor live and therefore she must expose herself to get money. She scrubs floors and does the dishes, like a slave.

A normal teenager is held around, and do not have big money problems.
For example: I’m a divorce-kid, I visit my mom and dad as I want, and go to school. I do nothing but get the money I need. But Billie doesn’t see her father.
This girl is living a different live; she lives all the serious things in the life.
If I have been like Billie, strong, then everything would be easier, but if I have the same life like Billie, I would not be able to do it.
Finally she got an OK live, where hers first success was setting in Harlem, but then she got a call, and was told that her father had died.
I’m proud of Billie, because she got a good result out of her hard live. Billie sings his wounds away.
 

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