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A day I´ll never forget

I´ll never forget it. We were sitting in the classroom on Friday afternoon. We were having a History lesson. I remember it clearly. Miss Harper was telling us about Christopher Columbus. Suddenly two men burst into room. They were wearing masks and carrying heavy guns. “Don’t move!” they shouted. “We are taking over the school!”  Some of us screamed. Miss Harper was very brave. She ran between the men and us, spread out her arms, and shouted, “Don’t you dare touch them”! One of the men grabbed her to the floor. “Shut up! This is a political action. Keep quiet and nobody gets hurt!” 
We found out, that the reason for the two perpetrators was ending in the school, was because they had robbed a bank before they came to the school. The police ran after them, but they could not find them at last.
We were very scared. The teacher asked help, because one of the students was very ill and have very much fever. The men had pushed our teacher, and she cried. She was very angry, because she could nothing. Oliver and Christian became very angry, because Mrs Harper is one of our best teachers. Our relationship is very good. Oliver and Christian ran amok, and tried to fight. Suddenly one of the man shot Oliver. Oliver felled down. Mrs Harper said: “How could you do it. It is a student, he is little and he has future, you have broken his future”.
The perpetrators started quarrelling with each other. “Why have you shot him?” I have said that we should not shoot. You are so stupid man” said one of the men.  All the students began to cry. They were full off fear. All the students began to shout after them, and then one of the perpetrators shot again, but nobody was being injured.  Whole the school was surrounding of the police.
The students` parents are waiting outside the school. They were very impatient. They wanted to help their children. But they could nothing. The media had taken place, and all of the people in the town were also very scared.
The teacher wanted medicine to the ill girl. She suddenly remembered that she had medicine in her bag. Than we heard the policeman talk, he said that the men must come out. But nothing happened.
It was night and everything was dark. We could not see each other, because the men had putted out the light. Oliver thought that he would not survive, so he tried to say goodbye. Han bled very, and unfortunately he was unconscious. All students panicked. The police called help from a psychologist, so he could talk with the men. The psychologist tried to talk with them, but the men did not listen to them. They said only, that they wanted a car. They would use it to escape with.
Christian could not endure to see his friends’ death, and he got a thought. He wrote a letter. He would remind the police that one of her friends was shot and they must call the ambulance or his friend would die. He threw the letter out the window and the police grabbed the letter and read the letter. The police called the ambulance.
The men said that Christian should come to them. They would use Christian as a projection. The other from the class could not stand it, so they began to attack. They began to hit. Luckily they got hold of them. They fastened the men and called fatly the police. The police came and took the perpetrators. Oliver was driven by the ambulance. After 3 hours was Oliver dead.