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An Englishman, who had a farm in Africa not very far away from the blue Nile, had an elephant too, which he cared much about. His dad had got it from natives. It was very tame and often it came to the veranda during dinner, and usually it left less hungry.
One evening there was a guest - a Frenchman -, and when they all sat around the table, as ussual the animal came approaching the party. Its’ owner made it go towards the guest, but this one would not dare to give it anything. The other laughed and assured him, that it would not hurt him, but it only wanted to get a little to eat. But he did not at all feel like being generous.
When the animal attempted a few times to get a little fruit from his plate, it seemed like being tired of playing this comedy. It went to the garden again and disappeared a few moments after between the trees. Soon people forgot about it – a part of it because the family saw it everyday and another part of it because of the stranger. It was uncommon, that there were guests from Europe.
But they did not see the elephant the next day. And neither the next afternoon had the animal come. People started looking for it, but no one had seen it.
It did not come back until 5 days after. Maybe it had swimmed across a watercourse, even though it had never done so before. The French master was relieved. He had to travel the day after. At dinner the same night he showed his gratitude, which surprised even an elephant.


Den danske tekst:

En englænder, som havde en farm i Afrika ikke langt fra den blå Nil, havde også en elefant, som han holdt meget af. Hans far havde fået den forærende af nogle indfødte. Den var meget tam og kom ofte hen til verandaen under middagen, og som regel gik den mindre sulten derfra.
En aften var der en gæst - en franskmand-, og da de alle sad rundt om bordet, kom dyret som sædvanlig gående og nærmede sig selskabet. Dens ejer fik den til at gå hen til gæsten, men denne turde ikke give den noget. De andre lo og forsikrede ham, at den ikke ville gøre ham fortræd, men at den blot ville have lidt at spise. Men han havde ikke spor lyst til at være gavmild. Da dyret et par gange havde prøvet at få lidt frugt fra hans tallerken, syntes den at blive træt af denne komedie. Den gik ud i haven igen og forsvandt lidt efter mellem træerne. Man glemte den snart - dels fordi familien så den hver dag og dels på grund af den fremmede. Det var sjælendt, at der kom gæster fra Europa. Men de så ikke elefanten den næste dag. Og heller ikke den næste aften kom dyret. Man begyndte at lede efter den, men ingen havde set den.
Den kom ikke tilbage før fem dage efter. Måske var den svømmet over et vandløb, selv om den aldrig havde gjort det før. Den franske herre var lettet. Han skulle rejse dagen efter. Ved middagen samme aften viste han en gavmildhed, der overraskede selv en elefant