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What does “The Red Line” tell us about the importance) of appearance in today’s society? What do you think about the importance of appearance in today’s society?


In the “The red line” does tells us about the appearance in today’s society. He heard especially about, Bob. Bob removes all the body in his body, and he really thinks that he is the most beautiful person. He tray to make perfection outside, maybe because he didn’t prefect inside. He is very shallow and doesn’t like people who don’t look like himself.
I think that we specially can se that the appearance is important for him.
But in this shot story we head about 3 persons. They are all judges each other by their appearance, and its very wrong in their assumptions. Berto is for example in London, to meet his “girl friend”, but Denise suspects him, for being a rapist the second he sees him.
I think they reasons that they are judges each other all the time about the appearance, is because they do not communicate at all.
Bob has lot of aggressions, because his weekly light, the karaoke, has been taken from him. It is too last year apparently, and he will not accept it. He also thinks that is it his job to do something about the apes, who are invading London.
If I has to relate to the appearance in today’s society, then I think that it constant I important. I think that all the people judge each other after theirs appearance.
And its also an problem in Denmark, there is a lot of people who doesn’t can get a job today, not because they doesn’t has ability to work, just because he/she is fat or wearer an scarf.