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18. januar 2007 af
Camz (Slettet)
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But what can we do, to improve children’s obesity? This is a big question. Do we have materials to give a good treatment to children’s, who are in bad condition? But in other hand, the government spends a lot of money to reduce fatness. But who makes the problems for both children and their parents? It is Producers. I have written in my title “Ban all junk food ads before 8pm, says watchdog” I think it is the most effective way to protect children’s diets.
In my point of view. Today are many children constantly bombarded with junk food marketing. I’m not satisfied over the way many companies ads their products to children. I have recently read in the newspaper, which many Danish companies are going to label on their products. It is a new advertising rule that will officially label chips as “junk food”.
The European Union needs to attack this problem concerning about junk food adverts on television.
på forhånd tak.
But what can we do, to improve children’s obesity? This is a big question. Do we have materials to give a good treatment to children’s, who are in bad condition? But in other hand, the government spends a lot of money to reduce fatness. But who makes the problems for both children and their parents? It is Producers. I have written in my title “Ban all junk food ads before 8pm, says watchdog” I think it is the most effective way to protect children’s diets.
In my point of view. Today are many children constantly bombarded with junk food marketing. I’m not satisfied over the way many companies ads their products to children. I have recently read in the newspaper, which many Danish companies are going to label on their products. It is a new advertising rule that will officially label chips as “junk food”.
The European Union needs to attack this problem concerning about junk food adverts on television.
på forhånd tak.
Svar #2
18. januar 2007 af Camz (Slettet)
Er der ikke en der ville rette min stil? fx. grammatikfejl mv.
Svar #3
18. januar 2007 af Katrine (Slettet)
Det er ret svært at rette i uden at omskrive kraftigt.
En måde, hvorpå du kan finde ud af, om dit engelske er godt, er ved at oversætte tilbage til dansk. Så kan du hurtigt se, hvor fejlene ligger.
Ex:
I mit synspunkt. I dag mange børn er konsant bombarderet med junkfood markedsføring. Jeg er ikke tilfreds over den måde mange firmaer reklamer deres produkter til børn. Jeg har fornylig læst i avisen, som mange danske firmaer vil mærke på deres produkter.
Kan du følge mig?
En måde, hvorpå du kan finde ud af, om dit engelske er godt, er ved at oversætte tilbage til dansk. Så kan du hurtigt se, hvor fejlene ligger.
Ex:
I mit synspunkt. I dag mange børn er konsant bombarderet med junkfood markedsføring. Jeg er ikke tilfreds over den måde mange firmaer reklamer deres produkter til børn. Jeg har fornylig læst i avisen, som mange danske firmaer vil mærke på deres produkter.
Kan du følge mig?
Svar #5
18. januar 2007 af nimarq (Slettet)
Du burde læse hvad hun siger. Desuden er det sådan set ret konstruktivt det hun skriver, da det vil gavne dit skriftlige engelsk, også på længere sigt.
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