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Rettelse af stil
23. februar 2008 af
Babeacius (Slettet)
Hej. håber der er nogen der gider se min stil igennem for fejl.
Do you fear death? If you had to could you face death? The themes in this story are death and fear. Are you scared of death, because it is one, of few things, you cannot control by yourself? But our main character does it in this story. He faces death and choice it. The setting is a place like Hawaii or Mallorca, where you can scuba dive. And Jon was send there to dive. He was a reporter. He did not do it voluntarily, but his job forced him to do it, so he did it. He did not like it either. In diving school he was not doing very while. Just like at home. He mentioned a girlfriend in the story and she was not with him. But he really did not care because it was not going very while between them.
At diving school his teach was Berto and there was one more on the team, Brian. Brian retired and Jon and he had nothing in common at all and he could not really talk to him. “But he envied Brian his calm, the methodical way he assembled and clambered into the gear” . He wanted Brian’s calmness and the way he handle scuba diving. Jon was terrified. All he could think about is how he was going to drawn. ”He poured more gin, but no matter how much he swallowed it was never enough” . To soothe this feelings of fear and the thought of drowning he drank, a lot. But would not matter, because he had to go under water some time, and that was going to be very soon. One day when he arrived to the diving school they completed the exercises and Berto said that they were going to scuba dive now, only ten metres, but Jon was horrified. “”Just before ascending I want you, Brian, to give Jon your spare mouthpiece to breathe from. Jon, be ready to take out your mouth-piece, insert Brian’s spare and come up to the surface with him”” . Jon is freaking out now. He is going to count on and he was going to take his own mouthpiece out to insert Brian’s spare, and I think he knew that he was going to freak out when the time came. “He’d heard that drowning was a quick death: your lungs filled and that was more or less it, bit of thrashing about, not a bad way to go” . He kind of calms himself down by saying that. If he is going to die it would not matter to him because it was a “good” way to pass away.
When they get under water he can see how deep it is on one side. Even though he wants to keep as far away as possible he is curious. He wants to see what is down there, just let him be swallowed in the deep darkness. But when it was time for Brian to hand over his spare, Jon panic. He knew he had to do it but he just could not do it, but he could not, he was too afraid. He took his mouthpiece out and when he got Brian’s mouthpiece in there were no air, just water. The next time they were going down it was not only ten metres, this time it was down in the deep. He knew that no one would be to save him, he was on his own, and that scared and stressed him even more. “At least if he knew he was definitely going to drown he could resign himself, remove some of this stress, this tearing anxiety. After all, everyone died in the end. What difference did it make when you went?” . Jon was not afraid of death he just wanted to know when he went and it did not really matter if he got shout or have a heart attack. He knows that thinks at home is not going very well. The magazine is going to fire him soon, his girlfriend was going to break up with him and he probably was not seeing his friends or family that much. So way fear losing something that really is not there?
“He forced himself to set off for the diving school and tried to ignore an inner voice. “You’re yellow, yellow, yellow, yellow”” . Maybe people at home thinks that he is yellow, a coward. Did not live life, was always predictable and never did anything spontaneous, lived life on the safe side. But with this experience he wanted to show them that they were wrong, that he could be spontaneous and unpredictable. But at the same time he is torture himself. Think that he is not good enough. “He looked at Berto’s shades. At first there was nothing and then he saw himself staring, wide-eyed. On the walk back the voice taunted him. “Yellow, yellow, yellow. Yellow as the desert sand.”” . He is putting himself down all the time. He does not like scuba diving, because he is afraid of the water and the deep and because of that he thinks that he is a coward. “He thought of his fear and became angry. Well, this would show them he wasn’t yellow. Then he was calm again and looked back up at himself from below. He dropped behind the others, swung out behind an outcrop of coral, pulled out the mouthpiece and drank” . He turns his fear into anger. No one is going to call him a coward or even think it. The biggest fear in many people is death, when they are going to die and how they are going to die. He would show them that he was not scared of anything, not even death.
The story is about living life and not be afraid to explore different and maybe dangerous. In the text “50 years - My story”, a man is telling about his life and what he had achieved. He had climbed Mount Everest, but even though this was a big thing it was not his most worthwhile thing he have done. The most important thing he had done was help other people. He helped was maintaining schools and medical clinics and restore their monasteries. I think that we are put on this earth to help each other and get the best out of it. So what if you have climbed the biggest mountain? You did that help? I agree with the man in this text and I hope that I can achieve the same things in my life.
And then there is “What Is Reckless Op About?”. It is about challenging yourself and living on the edge. Pushing yourself and do thinks you did not think was possible. That is what the main character is doing in the end of the story. Tries to do things he did not think he was capable of. Some people have the need to do dangerous things like jumping from a plane. It could be cool to try it but I do not have the need to do it. Like for example the show “Jackass”. I think that is insane to put yourself in that kind of pain and say “oh, I am just living life”. But I cannot see the comparison to that and living life.
The poem William Wordswoth has written “Lines Composed a Few Miles Above Tintern Abbey” is about a man and his understanding of nature. Since he was a young boy his view on nature had changed. He had learned to look at nature and now he appreciates nature. He finds himself through nature and he feels inspirit and elevated. Everything is so beautiful in nature, the sunsets, the blue air, the oceans and the air. The nature reflects on his life and soul and he sort of compares it to God. He writes that “a presence that disturbs me with the joy” . He feels that something is him life is changing, his view on nature. But even though it is disturbing him and changing his life he still had a feeling of joy and happiness.
In comparison to Yellow the nature is not descript as something good and beautiful in Yellow as it is in “Lines Composed a Few Miles Above Tintern Abbey”. “…a cliff dropping away into soft darkness. An immensity of nothingness, a massive absence that was a presence” . Jon descripts it as something that is dangerous. They both develop, but it is not the same way they are developing. The man in the poem are realizes the beauty of nature and how good and perfect it is, but Jon is afraid of it and sees it as something dark and dangerous and he “surrender” to it at the end.
På forhånd tak (:
Do you fear death? If you had to could you face death? The themes in this story are death and fear. Are you scared of death, because it is one, of few things, you cannot control by yourself? But our main character does it in this story. He faces death and choice it. The setting is a place like Hawaii or Mallorca, where you can scuba dive. And Jon was send there to dive. He was a reporter. He did not do it voluntarily, but his job forced him to do it, so he did it. He did not like it either. In diving school he was not doing very while. Just like at home. He mentioned a girlfriend in the story and she was not with him. But he really did not care because it was not going very while between them.
At diving school his teach was Berto and there was one more on the team, Brian. Brian retired and Jon and he had nothing in common at all and he could not really talk to him. “But he envied Brian his calm, the methodical way he assembled and clambered into the gear” . He wanted Brian’s calmness and the way he handle scuba diving. Jon was terrified. All he could think about is how he was going to drawn. ”He poured more gin, but no matter how much he swallowed it was never enough” . To soothe this feelings of fear and the thought of drowning he drank, a lot. But would not matter, because he had to go under water some time, and that was going to be very soon. One day when he arrived to the diving school they completed the exercises and Berto said that they were going to scuba dive now, only ten metres, but Jon was horrified. “”Just before ascending I want you, Brian, to give Jon your spare mouthpiece to breathe from. Jon, be ready to take out your mouth-piece, insert Brian’s spare and come up to the surface with him”” . Jon is freaking out now. He is going to count on and he was going to take his own mouthpiece out to insert Brian’s spare, and I think he knew that he was going to freak out when the time came. “He’d heard that drowning was a quick death: your lungs filled and that was more or less it, bit of thrashing about, not a bad way to go” . He kind of calms himself down by saying that. If he is going to die it would not matter to him because it was a “good” way to pass away.
When they get under water he can see how deep it is on one side. Even though he wants to keep as far away as possible he is curious. He wants to see what is down there, just let him be swallowed in the deep darkness. But when it was time for Brian to hand over his spare, Jon panic. He knew he had to do it but he just could not do it, but he could not, he was too afraid. He took his mouthpiece out and when he got Brian’s mouthpiece in there were no air, just water. The next time they were going down it was not only ten metres, this time it was down in the deep. He knew that no one would be to save him, he was on his own, and that scared and stressed him even more. “At least if he knew he was definitely going to drown he could resign himself, remove some of this stress, this tearing anxiety. After all, everyone died in the end. What difference did it make when you went?” . Jon was not afraid of death he just wanted to know when he went and it did not really matter if he got shout or have a heart attack. He knows that thinks at home is not going very well. The magazine is going to fire him soon, his girlfriend was going to break up with him and he probably was not seeing his friends or family that much. So way fear losing something that really is not there?
“He forced himself to set off for the diving school and tried to ignore an inner voice. “You’re yellow, yellow, yellow, yellow”” . Maybe people at home thinks that he is yellow, a coward. Did not live life, was always predictable and never did anything spontaneous, lived life on the safe side. But with this experience he wanted to show them that they were wrong, that he could be spontaneous and unpredictable. But at the same time he is torture himself. Think that he is not good enough. “He looked at Berto’s shades. At first there was nothing and then he saw himself staring, wide-eyed. On the walk back the voice taunted him. “Yellow, yellow, yellow. Yellow as the desert sand.”” . He is putting himself down all the time. He does not like scuba diving, because he is afraid of the water and the deep and because of that he thinks that he is a coward. “He thought of his fear and became angry. Well, this would show them he wasn’t yellow. Then he was calm again and looked back up at himself from below. He dropped behind the others, swung out behind an outcrop of coral, pulled out the mouthpiece and drank” . He turns his fear into anger. No one is going to call him a coward or even think it. The biggest fear in many people is death, when they are going to die and how they are going to die. He would show them that he was not scared of anything, not even death.
The story is about living life and not be afraid to explore different and maybe dangerous. In the text “50 years - My story”, a man is telling about his life and what he had achieved. He had climbed Mount Everest, but even though this was a big thing it was not his most worthwhile thing he have done. The most important thing he had done was help other people. He helped was maintaining schools and medical clinics and restore their monasteries. I think that we are put on this earth to help each other and get the best out of it. So what if you have climbed the biggest mountain? You did that help? I agree with the man in this text and I hope that I can achieve the same things in my life.
And then there is “What Is Reckless Op About?”. It is about challenging yourself and living on the edge. Pushing yourself and do thinks you did not think was possible. That is what the main character is doing in the end of the story. Tries to do things he did not think he was capable of. Some people have the need to do dangerous things like jumping from a plane. It could be cool to try it but I do not have the need to do it. Like for example the show “Jackass”. I think that is insane to put yourself in that kind of pain and say “oh, I am just living life”. But I cannot see the comparison to that and living life.
The poem William Wordswoth has written “Lines Composed a Few Miles Above Tintern Abbey” is about a man and his understanding of nature. Since he was a young boy his view on nature had changed. He had learned to look at nature and now he appreciates nature. He finds himself through nature and he feels inspirit and elevated. Everything is so beautiful in nature, the sunsets, the blue air, the oceans and the air. The nature reflects on his life and soul and he sort of compares it to God. He writes that “a presence that disturbs me with the joy” . He feels that something is him life is changing, his view on nature. But even though it is disturbing him and changing his life he still had a feeling of joy and happiness.
In comparison to Yellow the nature is not descript as something good and beautiful in Yellow as it is in “Lines Composed a Few Miles Above Tintern Abbey”. “…a cliff dropping away into soft darkness. An immensity of nothingness, a massive absence that was a presence” . Jon descripts it as something that is dangerous. They both develop, but it is not the same way they are developing. The man in the poem are realizes the beauty of nature and how good and perfect it is, but Jon is afraid of it and sees it as something dark and dangerous and he “surrender” to it at the end.
På forhånd tak (:
Svar #1
24. februar 2008 af OnlyMe07 (Slettet)
Are you afraid of death? If you had, you could face death? The themes in this story his death and fear. Are you afraid of death, because it is one of the few things you can not control yourself? But our main character is in this story. He faces death and choice. The setting is a place like Hawaii or Mallorca, where you can dive. And there was Jon send diving. He was a reporter. He did not voluntarily, but his job forced him to do, so he did it. He did not like. In diving school he was not doing very while. Just like home. He called a friend in the story and she was not with him. But he does not really care because it was not serious, while between them.
On his diving school learning Berto was and there was a more on the team, Brian. Brian retired and Jon and he had nothing in common at all and he could not really talk to him. "But he envied Brian are calm, methodical way in which he assembled and clambered into the acceleration". He wanted the peace Brian and the way he handle scuba diving. Jon was terrified. All he could think about how he was drawn. "He has poured more gin, but no matter how much he swallowed it was never enough". To calm those feelings of fear and the thought of drowning, he drank a lot. But would not matter, because he had to go under water for some time and that went very fast. One day, when he arrived at the diving school they completed the exercises and Berto said that they would go diving now, only ten meters, but Jon was shocked. "" Just before ascending I want you, Brian, to give Jon my spare mouthpiece to breathe. Jon, prepared to your mouth-pieces, insert the spare parts and Brian arrive at the surface with him. "Jon is now terribly. He goes on and he went on his own mouthpiece adding Brian spare, and I think he knew that he did freak out when the time came. "he had heard that drowning was a quick death: your lungs filled, and that was more or less what thrashing about, not a bad way to go." He kind of calms himself by saying that. would die if he is not a matter for him because it was a "good" way to go.
When they flooded he can see how deeply it is on the one hand. Although he wants to keep as far away as possible, he is curious. He wants to see what's down, but let him be swallowed in the deep darkness. But now it is time for Brian to hand over his spare, Jon panic. He knew that he had to do, but he just could not do, but he could not, he was also scared. He took his mouthpiece and when he got Brian in the mouthpiece no air, but water. The next time they went down was not just ten metres, this time it was in the deep. He knew that no one would save him, he was on his own, and that scared and stressed him even more. "At least, if he knew that he was sure he would drown himself could resign, remove some of this stress, tearing this fear. Indeed, everyone died in the end. What does make a difference when you went?". Jon was not afraid of death, he wanted to know where he went and not really matter if he is crying or heart attack. He does know that home is not very good. The magazine will soon fire him, his girlfriend was going to break with him and he was probably not see his friends or family that much. So how fear losing something that should not?
"He forced himself to set off for the diving school and tried to ignore an inner voice." You are yellow, orange, yellow, yellow, "". Maybe people at home thinks that he is yellow, a coward. Not life, it was always predictable and has never something spontaneous, lived life on the safe side. But with this experience he wanted to show that they were wrong, that he could be spontaneous and unpredictable. But while he is torture itself. Consider that he is not good enough. "He looked at the Berto tones. Initially there was nothing, and when he saw himself staring, wide-eyed. On the walk back the voice taunted him." Yellow, orange, yellow. Yellow as the desert sand. . "He continues down all the time. He is not like diving, because he is afraid of the water and the deep, and because of that he thinks he is a coward." He thought of his fear and anger. Well, this would give them he was not yellow. Then again, he was calm and looked back on itself down. He fell behind the others, swung out behind a pride of coral, drawn from the mouth and drank. "He shows his fear into anger. Nobody him coward or even think. The biggest fear of many people is death, when they go die, and how they will die. He would show that he is not afraid of anything, not even death.
The story is about the lives and living standards are not afraid to explore different and perhaps dangerous. In the text "50 years - My Story", a man tells about his life and what he had achieved. He had climbed Mount Everest, but even if it was one big thing was not his most valuable what he has done. The most important thing he had done was help other people. He was helped maintaining schools and medical clinics and the restoration of their monasteries. I think that we are on this earth to help each other and get the best out of it. So what if you climbed the highest mountain? You have that help? I agree with the man in this text, and I hope I can achieve the same things in my life.
And then there's "What Is Reckless On Over?". It's about challenging yourself and life on the edge. Pushing themselves and think you did not think was possible. That is what the main character does in the end of the story. Trying to do things that he did not think he is capable of. Some people have the need to dangerous things like jumping out of an airplane. It might be cool to try, but I do not need to do it. As for example, the show "Jackass". I think it is insane to get in that kind of pain and say 'oh, I am just living life ". But I can not see that the comparison with that life and living.
The poem William Wordswoth wrote "Lines compiled a Few Miles Above Tintern Abbey" is about a man and his understanding of nature. Since he was a boy, his views on the nature had changed. He had learned to look at the nature and now he appreciates nature. He considers himself by nature and he feels inspirit and elevated. Everything is so beautiful in nature, sunsets, blue sky, the ocean and the sky. The nature reflects on his life and soul, and he kind of compares it to God. He writes that "a presence that disturbs me with joy". He feels that something is his life is changing, his vision of nature. But even though it is worrying him and changed his life, he still had a sense of joy and happiness.
Compared to the nature Yellow is not descript as something good and beautiful in Yellow as in "Lines compiled a Few Miles Above Tintern Abbey". "… A cliff fall away in the soft darkness. Expanse of nothingness, a mass absence was a presence. Jon descripts it as something that is dangerous. They both develop, but it's not the same way they are developing. The man in the poem, noting the beauty of nature and how good and perfect, but Jon is afraid and sees it as something dark and dangerous and he "surrender" to the end.
On his diving school learning Berto was and there was a more on the team, Brian. Brian retired and Jon and he had nothing in common at all and he could not really talk to him. "But he envied Brian are calm, methodical way in which he assembled and clambered into the acceleration". He wanted the peace Brian and the way he handle scuba diving. Jon was terrified. All he could think about how he was drawn. "He has poured more gin, but no matter how much he swallowed it was never enough". To calm those feelings of fear and the thought of drowning, he drank a lot. But would not matter, because he had to go under water for some time and that went very fast. One day, when he arrived at the diving school they completed the exercises and Berto said that they would go diving now, only ten meters, but Jon was shocked. "" Just before ascending I want you, Brian, to give Jon my spare mouthpiece to breathe. Jon, prepared to your mouth-pieces, insert the spare parts and Brian arrive at the surface with him. "Jon is now terribly. He goes on and he went on his own mouthpiece adding Brian spare, and I think he knew that he did freak out when the time came. "he had heard that drowning was a quick death: your lungs filled, and that was more or less what thrashing about, not a bad way to go." He kind of calms himself by saying that. would die if he is not a matter for him because it was a "good" way to go.
When they flooded he can see how deeply it is on the one hand. Although he wants to keep as far away as possible, he is curious. He wants to see what's down, but let him be swallowed in the deep darkness. But now it is time for Brian to hand over his spare, Jon panic. He knew that he had to do, but he just could not do, but he could not, he was also scared. He took his mouthpiece and when he got Brian in the mouthpiece no air, but water. The next time they went down was not just ten metres, this time it was in the deep. He knew that no one would save him, he was on his own, and that scared and stressed him even more. "At least, if he knew that he was sure he would drown himself could resign, remove some of this stress, tearing this fear. Indeed, everyone died in the end. What does make a difference when you went?". Jon was not afraid of death, he wanted to know where he went and not really matter if he is crying or heart attack. He does know that home is not very good. The magazine will soon fire him, his girlfriend was going to break with him and he was probably not see his friends or family that much. So how fear losing something that should not?
"He forced himself to set off for the diving school and tried to ignore an inner voice." You are yellow, orange, yellow, yellow, "". Maybe people at home thinks that he is yellow, a coward. Not life, it was always predictable and has never something spontaneous, lived life on the safe side. But with this experience he wanted to show that they were wrong, that he could be spontaneous and unpredictable. But while he is torture itself. Consider that he is not good enough. "He looked at the Berto tones. Initially there was nothing, and when he saw himself staring, wide-eyed. On the walk back the voice taunted him." Yellow, orange, yellow. Yellow as the desert sand. . "He continues down all the time. He is not like diving, because he is afraid of the water and the deep, and because of that he thinks he is a coward." He thought of his fear and anger. Well, this would give them he was not yellow. Then again, he was calm and looked back on itself down. He fell behind the others, swung out behind a pride of coral, drawn from the mouth and drank. "He shows his fear into anger. Nobody him coward or even think. The biggest fear of many people is death, when they go die, and how they will die. He would show that he is not afraid of anything, not even death.
The story is about the lives and living standards are not afraid to explore different and perhaps dangerous. In the text "50 years - My Story", a man tells about his life and what he had achieved. He had climbed Mount Everest, but even if it was one big thing was not his most valuable what he has done. The most important thing he had done was help other people. He was helped maintaining schools and medical clinics and the restoration of their monasteries. I think that we are on this earth to help each other and get the best out of it. So what if you climbed the highest mountain? You have that help? I agree with the man in this text, and I hope I can achieve the same things in my life.
And then there's "What Is Reckless On Over?". It's about challenging yourself and life on the edge. Pushing themselves and think you did not think was possible. That is what the main character does in the end of the story. Trying to do things that he did not think he is capable of. Some people have the need to dangerous things like jumping out of an airplane. It might be cool to try, but I do not need to do it. As for example, the show "Jackass". I think it is insane to get in that kind of pain and say 'oh, I am just living life ". But I can not see that the comparison with that life and living.
The poem William Wordswoth wrote "Lines compiled a Few Miles Above Tintern Abbey" is about a man and his understanding of nature. Since he was a boy, his views on the nature had changed. He had learned to look at the nature and now he appreciates nature. He considers himself by nature and he feels inspirit and elevated. Everything is so beautiful in nature, sunsets, blue sky, the ocean and the sky. The nature reflects on his life and soul, and he kind of compares it to God. He writes that "a presence that disturbs me with joy". He feels that something is his life is changing, his vision of nature. But even though it is worrying him and changed his life, he still had a sense of joy and happiness.
Compared to the nature Yellow is not descript as something good and beautiful in Yellow as in "Lines compiled a Few Miles Above Tintern Abbey". "… A cliff fall away in the soft darkness. Expanse of nothingness, a mass absence was a presence. Jon descripts it as something that is dangerous. They both develop, but it's not the same way they are developing. The man in the poem, noting the beauty of nature and how good and perfect, but Jon is afraid and sees it as something dark and dangerous and he "surrender" to the end.
Svar #2
08. marts 2010 af Pernillesa (Slettet)
Setting? Hawaii eller Mallorca?
Det foregår i Egypten, se den første linje: "Welcome to Egypt! Welcome to Egypt!"
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