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Jeg har 3 stile for til i morgen og mangler stadig at skrive en. Men jeg er lige blevet færdig med min engelsk stil, og fordi jeg ikke er så god til engelsk, vil jeg spørge jer om i havde lyst/tid til at hjælpe med at rette min stil?

Louise walked towards the station. She had celebrated her birhtsday the night before and she felt a bit dizzy. 18 years. Her parents had asked her a thousand times to take a decision. Would she come back or would she live her life in the big city? They knew she had an "English" boyfriend and they knew things were not easy for her. Yesterday had been a day to remember. Suddenly it felt easy. She ran toward the telephone box. She had made up her mind. She take catch the telephone and ring to her parents. She say that she had take her dicision, and that was, that she will become in the big city. She think that she not can live without all they thing she user everyday as, television, mobile, computer, a car etc. all this may she not do when she choose to become amish, and follow the church rules. After she had talking with her parents in the telephone, had she a strange feeling in hers stomach, a feeling on she have take the right dicision, but hers boyfriend would not live who amish.
A month later dead Louises boyfriend with a car crash. It was a hard time too Louise. She had not so much money, then it was her boyfriend there earn most money. She try in long time to found a new job but it was very difficult. A day when Louise go a long walk, she think that she will ring to her parents and tell them what there is happened. on the afternoon she ring to her parents and tell them the whole story. Her parents had give her a new chance to think over on she will be amish. Louise was very miserable and she had hardly no money. She choose to be amish and she turn back to her parents.
Now three years later, she have a happy life. She is marry with a amish man, and they have get a little girl for 5 month ago.