Fyldt med fejl?

Hej. 

Jeg skal lave et resume af en bog i engelsk, og det har jeg så gjort her: (Tekst længere neede) 

Men så er det bare det, at jeg synes selv det lyder lidt mærkeligt noget af det. Så jeg ville lige høre, om det virkelig bare er FYLDT med fejl, eller bare har sådan 'normale' fejl. (Dette skal svare til 8. klasse niveau, da jeg går i 8. klasse.)

• Vicki was on the way home, when a guy is shouting ‘Want to lift?’. She is telling him to push off. When she is walking again, she meets her, her friend, Will. He is also asking her, if she want to have a lift. She is saying yes and going in to Wills car. Will is going up to North End, a place where boys is going to showing each other their cars and races against each other, of cause for money. But Will is saying to Vicki, that they only are showing their cars and not racing. Vicki thinks that it is more fun that use her Friday night at a car show, than sitting home a watch TV, so she is taking with him up to North End.

While Vicki and Will are sitting in the car at North End, a guy is drive through the window, it was Mac. ‘Ready?’, Mac asked Will. ‘Ready’, said Will to him. Vicki realized that she was in a race, if she could like it or not. Will and Vicki lost the race. They were two hundred meters backwards him, when he was crossing the finish line.

Will now wanted revenge. He asked Vicki, if she would drive together with him tomorrow again. It were more fair, if both of their cars had a passenger with. Then there will be the same weight in each car. She thought again, that it was more fun to drive with Will in his car, than watching TV the whole night. So she is said yes. They will meet at the corner, near Chip’s shop.

When she came around the corner next day, where Will standing by his car. He had the same cap, shirt and shorts on. When she got into the car, she could she a man in the backseat. It was Matt, Will’s cousin.

When they came up to North End were there three cars – but Mac’s car was not among them. Then a car came in high speed, it was Mac. Will lost the race. He gave Mac his last money. Mac asked Will if he wanted to go to Man at Arms, the local pub – but will had no money, and Mac was the last he wanted to drink with.

Will was angry, he wanted revenge, again. But not with a race, he was now going to ‘check’ his tires. The pub was situated at the top of a hill. Matt and Will went up at the hill. They found Mat’s car, and fixed the tires on it. Then they heard footsteps. It was Mac and his crew. Will and Matt ran across the way and were hiding behind a bush. But behind that bush was it going down again. When there were going backward, they felt down, half-falling and half-rolling down at the hill.

Vicky was waiting at the end of the hill. When Matt and Will came down, they were hardly hurt. They needed to go to the hospital. But no one of they couldn’t drive. So it ended up with, that Will should steer the car and press the pedals, and Vicky should change gear. It went good – they came successfully to the hospital.

Tak på forhånd !

 :-)