lyder det her godt og er der fejlCongratulations with your 50 years’ birthday, I am so happy that you send those letters to me, I think I understand why you adopt me away. The only reason why you did

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Congratulations with your 50 years’ birthday. I am so happy that you send those letters to me. Now I do actually understand why you adopted me away. The only reason why you did it was so I could get the best life as possible. I can truly say that I did. My adoptive dad did it well. He gave me what I needed. He gave me new clothes and the feeling of safety. His food was always perfect. He would always help me if I ran into some troubles. In school I was a cleaver girl with a lot of friends I even got a special price for the best pupil in the school. After I end the school, things started to go bad for me. I couldn’t find any job, and there weren’t any boys interested in me. In that period of time I was very sad and couldn’t see what I should do in my life. It was an awful period. Until I met a boy named Darrel Jackson. He was so sweet to me. After 5 months together, we got married. Got a daughter named Emelia. Now she is 4 years old, and is starting to talk a little bit. One of the future things I want to do in my life is to get a job, instead of going home all day cleaning and taking care of the kid. I don’t want to be a traditionally wife like everyone else. I want to work just like men do. I have never been so happy as I am right now.  I want to come and visit you so we can have a talk. I would love to know how you are as a person. I think you are quiet though of a woman, because It sounds like, in the letters you have sent me. I have always speculated about why you didn’t come to see me. Was it because you think it would be best for me to not notice I was adopted? I am hoping we can get a relation to each other. Where we can visit each other once or twice a month. I hope I can visit you before you will turn completely blind, so you can see how I look. Do you want me to take my family with me, when I am visiting you? Or do you just wants to talk to me alone? It is up to you. Please write back soon!!

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