Engelsk stil - hvad synes i om den?

Hej. Jeg skulle skrive denne her stil i lidt under 2 timer til terminsprøven i engelsk. Vil bare gerne høre hvad i synes om den. I må meget gerne give et karater. 
- * Jeg skulle skrive et bloginlæg om min ferie i Syd Afrika som mine venner og familie kunne læse. *
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My holiday in South Africa
I’ve been in South Africa for quite some time now and i am loving it! It has been so great. I have visited so many cool places. Recently I was visiting a school in Cape town. It was so inspiring and refreshing to see those kids be so interested in learning, I mean where I am from, kids complain every single day going to school. And the kids were so sweet and kind. They even offered me their lunch and of course I had to say yes because here in South Africa it is impolite to refuse something that is offered to you. I was there until the school day was over and I had to hurry because I had so many other places i wanted to visit. And because i already was in Cape town, I went to the Table Top Mountain cableway with some friends that I made when I was visiting a school here in Cape town. And let me tell you, it was so much fun and we had a little incident. First we hiked up to the mountain but then suddenly my foot slipped and when I was about to fall I saw my friend who was right in front of me so i quickly grabbed her hand and we both fell. We both got mud and dirty water all over us but thank god we didn't get hurt or injured. We had a good laugh and made some fun memories. But we continued hiking and we finally arrived to the cableway. We sat us in the cableway. The view was so pretty. And I seriously did not wanted to leave. The next day i wanted to go somewhere more quiet and down to earth because of the really exhausting day I had the day before. So i went to The Apartheid Museum in Johannesburg. The museum had a lot of interesting stuff and i took pictures of some of the statutes and old art pieces. I was there for a couple of hours. After that I called some of my friends and we went to a safari in West of Pretoria and there were sp many big elephants there. I took a lot of pictures because i wanted to show them to my friends and family when I go back home. It began to get dark so i had to go home. Me and my friends were all very sad because i had to leave the next day, but I was also very happy because, while i was here I had the most fun i have had for a really long time. And this holiday has to be my all time favourite holiday. I’ve never done so many things in a holiday before. I met a lot of cool people along the way also and made a lot of memories with them. I will definitely come back to this place again!