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hvad med at du selv gør et forsøg og så kan vi kigge det igennem bagefter? 

Har prøvet, men det ser bare slet ikke rigtig ud. Så derfor valgte jeg at slette det igen.

Now she was gone for good, she needed to be buried. Henry thought the traditional Chinese way
with food offerings, longevity, blankets and prayer ceremonies. Lasting several days despite
Marty's fit about cremating her. He was so modern he'd been seeing a counsellor and dealing with
his mother's death through an online support group, what ever that was going online sounded like
talking to no one, which Henry had some first hand experience in. In real life it was lonely almost
as lonely as the cemetery, where he'd buried Ethel. She now had a gorgeous view of Lake
Washington and was interred with Seattle's other Chinese notables like Bruce Lee and his own
son Brandon.

Her er det jeg har prøvet.

Now she was gone for good. She needed to be buried, Henry thought, the traditional Chinese way, with food offerings, longevity blankets, and prayer ceremonies lasting several days despite Marty’s fit about cremating her. He was so modern. He’d been seeing a counselor and dealing with his mother’s death through an online support group, whatever that was. Going online sounded like talking to no one, which Henry had some firsthand experience in in real life. It was lonely. Almost as lonely as Lake View Cemetery, where he’d buried Ethel. She now had a gorgeous view of Lake Washington, and was interred with Seattle’s other Chinese notables, like Bruce Lee and his own son, Brandon.

Her er min rettede version.

Mange tak

1.  -intet komma efter "The Chinese way."

2.  "Going online sounded like talking to no one, which Henry had some firsthand experience (in) of in real life.