Engelsk essay - Smoking ban v.2

Så er jeg tilbage, er netop i gang med at skrive en Engelsk stil, afgangsprøven fra 2008 i engelsk B.

 jeg har skrevet en af delopgaverne og jeg er sindsyg dårlig til at rette det gramatiske.... 

så jeg ville lige spørge om jeg ikke kunne få lidt hjælp, Udelukket med det gramatiske:

B - Comment on the use of exaggeration and irony in text 3. Illustrate your answer with quotations from the text.
 

The first thing I noticed in text two was the headline, “Another victory for Britain’s insufferable paternalists” it’s an extreme negative headline, and especially “insufferable paternalists” is a big exaggeration. This headline is the foundation of a text full of insults, irony and negative terms.

In the first paragraph Simon Jenkins describes how tough a decision it was for the MPs to decide weather they should ban smoking or not (l. 1-7). He uses a metaphor when he mentions, “it was the sound of MPs thinking for themselves”. It is a metaphor because there is no way it is possible to hear what other people are thinking. If you for some reason could hear them, I don’t think it would sound “whirring, clanking and gurgling” (l. 1).

Another exaggeration is when he claims that the MPs have restricted liberty and how the next step will be a police state with inspectors checking every house for smoke scent (l. 28-31). He thinks the government should make some exceptions’ instead of generalizing. An example could be bars and clubs (l. 25-27).

In the end he says “”If the people of Bangor want to shut their pubs on Sunday, why should I or Tony Blair want to stop them” (l. 53-55). This is a very strange sentence, because why should Blair matter about a pub in a small town in Wales[1]. I think he is trying to point out, how pointless the smoking ban is.

Towards the end he writes “[…] only because Britain is the world capital of insufferable paternalism” once again he exaggerates and to call Britain the capital of insufferable paternalism is almost a step off track, but it fits well in the article which is full of exaggerating’s and complicated terms.

[1] http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Bangor,_Gwynedd#Geography