Engelsk hjælp

Her er mit eget bud på forhånd mange tak, hvis nogen venlige sjæle vil hjælpe mig.

Earlier the most of the leaving students dream about to have a “real job”, when they leave the school. Then is it no more. Now many young people would like to start there own company, when they see it like an opportunity too earn some money, with at the same moment to have there freedom. There are after all many obstacle for young self starters both personally and financial, but fortunately are there also many places, where you can get help.

Shell Livewire have for an example advice about 200.000 young self starters in Britain. Livewires success have now pass to the establishment of Livewire International, there in now can find in 12 countries over the entire world.

kommer med et bud lige om lidt

her er mit bud... prøv at komme med en rettet udgave... håber du forstår mine rettelser.


Earlier /the/ most of the (leaving) graduation students dream(t) about /to have/ (having) a “real job”, when they /leave/ (left) the school. /Then is it no more/ (It’s not that way nowadays). /Now/ (Today) many /young people/ (youngsters) /would like/ (wish) to start /there/ (their) own company (eller buisness), /when/ (as) /they see it/ (it seems like) an opportunity (to them) /too/ (to) earn /some/ money, /with at the same moment to have there freedom/ (while hey have their own leisure). (after all,) There are /after all/ many obstacle(S) for young (entrepreneurs) /self starters/ /both/ (as well as) personally and financial, but fortunately /are/ there (are) also many places, where you can get help.

(For example) Shell Livewire have /for an example/ (given) advice (to) about 200.000 young /self starters/ (entrepreneurs) in Britain (Great Britain). Livewires success /have/ (has) now /pass/ (led) to the establishment of Livewire International, /there/ (which) /in/ /now/ (you) can find in 12 countries over the entire world (now).


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Jeg vil også godt bidrage og jeg tager udgangspunkt i rettelserne i #3. Ellers nogle gode rettelser i #3 :-)

leaving --> skal slettes, da det siger sig selv med ordet graduating
graduation --> graduating
left --> finished or completed (bedre ordvalg)
buisness --> business
hey --> they

hehe ja. ka godt se hvad du mener nu.. det er rigtig nok!

#5
Hehe, men som sagt et nydelig stykke arbejde du har præsteret :-)

Tusind tusind tak for hjælpen her er den rettede version.

Earlier most of the leaving graduation students dreamt about having a “real job”, when they finished the school. It’s not that way nowadays. Today many youngster wish to start their own business, as it seems like an opportunity to them to earn money, while they have their own leisure. After all There are many obstacles for young entrepreneurs as well as personally and financial, but fortunately there are also many places, where you can get help.

For example Shell Livewire has advice to about 200.000 young entrepreneurs in Great Britain. Livewires success has now led to the establishment of Livewire International, which you can find in 12 countries over the entire world now.