Rettelse af Engelsk stil på en side.

Hej venner..
Tænkte på om i lige havde lyst til at kigge på min stil jeg har skrevet.. Formuleringsfejl, bøjning. m.m.

Stilen:

When I first read the poem “What Is Success”, I just thought it was a normal poem just like every others. I have yet failed to see the deeper meaning in most of those, but this one was very different. It took me about ten minutes to realise, that this poem was a very good subject for an essay. When reading the assignment at the bottom of the poem, you realise that there are so many different points of views, which makes it almost impossible to write down anything about it.

The success in my life? There are many things I think are successful, but there are always things there are most successful.
Friends, Family, A good work and economy safety.

Friends are success, because, when I’m together with them, I can tell them anything. If I have a problem, I can also came to them and tell them about the problem. Or if a need help to my They always help me, and that's a success.
If I have a bored day, the first I do, is calling to my friends, and find on something’s craps we can makes. For example see football in TV, drink some beers or go to town and make lot of crazy things and hanging out together.

Many things could make me feel successful. The classic cliché is of course having a wonderful wife, a bunch of money and a good job to wake up to every morning. This would be a great achievement for me, being able to buy a house and maybe have children some day. I will also be ambitious and try to get success, and by success I mean knowledge, wealth and a good background, which can stand together with me.

Success for me, is also my family. It's my mother and father there have get me in to this world. We have a big house, I have to brothers. I love all from my family but sometimes, I forget it?

Folk er også velkommene til at komme forbi msn og tilføje mig, [email protected]