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Hjæp med eng. opdigtet historie
28. april 2003 af
Mr_Fuzzy (Slettet)
Hejsa, jeg har fået den opgave at skrive en detektiv historie. Jeg håber der er nogen der gider at komme med "lærerige" helst gramatiske rettelser til det jeg har skrevet :-D på forhånd Mange tak !
“Mr. James Phillimore a rich business man, who never had a single spare time for him self, because of his big dedication to his job, has disappeared from the earth's surface. There has been an intensive investigation from the side of the police, but they haven’t been able to find any tracks or clues, that could lead to Mr. James Phillimore. The police only got hold of a statement from his butler called Luis. He said that: “On the day where Mr. Phillimore disappeared I was going to ride him to work with the carriage. Before we were going to ride, Mr. Phillimore insisted to get his umbrella in the house. I couldn’t understand why he didn’t ask me, and on the other hand according to the weather forecast it wasn’t going to rain”. Furthermore, there were no usable information from the closest relatives, that the police could use. “
Holmes threw the paper with the article to the sleeping Watson who sat in his comfortable armchair. Watson made a groan of annoyance, but he didn’t say a word, he just read the article. The accomplishment of Holmes’s little task, was showed in all of Watson’s face, and he made it all clear with a final smile on his lips. Holmes accepted the challenge with a big self-satisfaction, and leaned back in his armchair and smoked on his pipe. Watson suddenly saw a curly paper which had the headline “The jewel-necklace which miraculous disappeared”. Watson showed it to Holmes and said that he had found it as a mere coincidence, and said in a humorously tone that it had a connection to the disappearing of Mr. Phillimore. Holmes changed instantly facial expression and was thinking very hard. When he finished he said with a relieving expression: “Splendid, my dear Watson”. He rushed to the telephone and phoned a message to the Scotland Yard, and wanted a warrant.
“Mr. James Phillimore a rich business man, who never had a single spare time for him self, because of his big dedication to his job, has disappeared from the earth's surface. There has been an intensive investigation from the side of the police, but they haven’t been able to find any tracks or clues, that could lead to Mr. James Phillimore. The police only got hold of a statement from his butler called Luis. He said that: “On the day where Mr. Phillimore disappeared I was going to ride him to work with the carriage. Before we were going to ride, Mr. Phillimore insisted to get his umbrella in the house. I couldn’t understand why he didn’t ask me, and on the other hand according to the weather forecast it wasn’t going to rain”. Furthermore, there were no usable information from the closest relatives, that the police could use. “
Holmes threw the paper with the article to the sleeping Watson who sat in his comfortable armchair. Watson made a groan of annoyance, but he didn’t say a word, he just read the article. The accomplishment of Holmes’s little task, was showed in all of Watson’s face, and he made it all clear with a final smile on his lips. Holmes accepted the challenge with a big self-satisfaction, and leaned back in his armchair and smoked on his pipe. Watson suddenly saw a curly paper which had the headline “The jewel-necklace which miraculous disappeared”. Watson showed it to Holmes and said that he had found it as a mere coincidence, and said in a humorously tone that it had a connection to the disappearing of Mr. Phillimore. Holmes changed instantly facial expression and was thinking very hard. When he finished he said with a relieving expression: “Splendid, my dear Watson”. He rushed to the telephone and phoned a message to the Scotland Yard, and wanted a warrant.
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28. april 2003 af SP anonym (Slettet)
Her er din stil med mine rettelser.. Håber du får nytte af dem.. :-) *Ss*
“Mr. James Phillimore is a rich business man, who never had a single spare time for him self, because of his big dedication to his job, has disappeared from the earth's surface. There has been an intensive investigation by the police, but they haven’t been able to find any tracks or clues, that could lead them to Mr. James Phillimore. The police only got hold of a statement from his butler called Luis. He said: “On the day, where Mr. Phillimore disappeared I was going to ride him to work with the carriage. Before we were going to ride, Mr. Phillimore insisted to get his umbrella in the house. I couldn’t understand why he didn’t ask me, and on the other hand according to the weather forecast it wasn’t going to rain”. Furthermore, there was no usable information from the closest relatives, which the police could use“.
Holmes threw the paper with the article to the sleeping Watson, who sat in his comfortable armchair. Watson made a groan of annoyance, but he didn’t say a word, he just read the article. The accomplishment of Holmes’s little task, was showed in all of Watson’s face, and he made it all clear with a satisfying smile on his lips. Holmes accepted the challenge with a big self-satisfaction, and leaned back in his armchair and smoked his pipe. Watson suddenly saw a curly paper which had the headline, “The jewel-necklace which miraculous disappeared”. Watson showed it to Holmes and said that he had found it as a mere coincidence, and said in a humorously tone that it had a connection to the disappearing of Mr. Phillimore. Holmes changed instantly facial expression and thought very hard. When he was finish he said with a relieving expression: “Splendid, my dear Watson”. He rushed to the telephone and phoned Scotland Yard, and wanted a warrant.
En lille huskeregel til dig i øvrigt om hvordan du aldrig må sætte et komma på engelsk! Sæt ALDRIG komme foran "that"..
Håber du kan bruge det til noget..
Mvh. Camo
“Mr. James Phillimore is a rich business man, who never had a single spare time for him self, because of his big dedication to his job, has disappeared from the earth's surface. There has been an intensive investigation by the police, but they haven’t been able to find any tracks or clues, that could lead them to Mr. James Phillimore. The police only got hold of a statement from his butler called Luis. He said: “On the day, where Mr. Phillimore disappeared I was going to ride him to work with the carriage. Before we were going to ride, Mr. Phillimore insisted to get his umbrella in the house. I couldn’t understand why he didn’t ask me, and on the other hand according to the weather forecast it wasn’t going to rain”. Furthermore, there was no usable information from the closest relatives, which the police could use“.
Holmes threw the paper with the article to the sleeping Watson, who sat in his comfortable armchair. Watson made a groan of annoyance, but he didn’t say a word, he just read the article. The accomplishment of Holmes’s little task, was showed in all of Watson’s face, and he made it all clear with a satisfying smile on his lips. Holmes accepted the challenge with a big self-satisfaction, and leaned back in his armchair and smoked his pipe. Watson suddenly saw a curly paper which had the headline, “The jewel-necklace which miraculous disappeared”. Watson showed it to Holmes and said that he had found it as a mere coincidence, and said in a humorously tone that it had a connection to the disappearing of Mr. Phillimore. Holmes changed instantly facial expression and thought very hard. When he was finish he said with a relieving expression: “Splendid, my dear Watson”. He rushed to the telephone and phoned Scotland Yard, and wanted a warrant.
En lille huskeregel til dig i øvrigt om hvordan du aldrig må sætte et komma på engelsk! Sæt ALDRIG komme foran "that"..
Håber du kan bruge det til noget..
Mvh. Camo
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