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Dear daddy.

How are you?
How is it going with you and the family. I miss you very much. How is my mother? Is she started her new job, as you wrote in your last letter? I hope that she started, because she deserve (to have) that job. 
Tell her that I miss her so much. I look  in her picture everynight, before i sleep. I look at her picture, when I wake up. I have both of your pictures in two photo frames. 
How is Dylan and Brandon? I miss them very much. I got a letter from Dylan last week. He wrote that he is mad ("mad" er amerikansk) at you. Why don’t you let him go with his school to Africa? Daddy, you should let him go, he is not a kid anymore and that school trip will make him more responsible. Believe me daddy, I know what I’m talking about. I end up in jail, but I know that Dylan is a smart guy, he is not me. 
I'm very happy that we still keep in touch and that you are not mad at me anymore. You know that I regret what happened. I'm sorry the way I acted dad. I have learned much from my past and i will not do any crime anymore. I hate racism and i just couldn’t stop my self from hitting that girl. But I have learned that violence solves nothing. Moreover, the girl also been indicted for racist remarks, so she must pay some money to the state. It surprised me. But it must be a new law for racisme where there are limits. 
You asked me about life in prison. I hate it although most guards here likes me. I am more quiet and calm than the others. Although they can treat us bad, they can also be nice. 
I think that life out there is more better than this life in prison. I feel bad and can’t wait to come out of this unhappiness and missery. I am glad that I will be out of here next month and start over again. I can hardly wait. 
Will you send the applications I sent you lately? So I can start to work immediately. I hope that I can get a job and that...... crime I committed not ruin my life. I miss life outside of the four walls.
you can all come at weekend and visit me, there are free day for all prisoners. 
Take care and I love you all very much. See you soon. 
All my love, From your lovely daughter Brenda. 

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Dear daddy.

How are you?
How is it going with you and the family. I miss you very much. How is mummy or mum? Has she started her new job, as you wrote in your last letter? I hope she has because she deserves that job.
Tell her that I miss her so much. I look at her picture every night before i sleep. I look at her picture, when I wake up. I have both of your pictures in two photo frames.
How is Dylan and Brandon? I miss them very much too. I got (got / received) a letter from Dylan last week. He wrote that he is mad at you. Why don’t you let him go with his school to Africa? Daddy, you should let him go, he is not a kid anymore and that school trip will make him more responsible. Believe me daddy, I know what I’m talking about. I ended up in jail, but I know that Dylan is a smart guy, he is not me.
I'm very happy that we still keep in touch and that you are not mad at me anymore. You know that I regret what happened. I'm sorry the way I acted dad. I have learned so much from my past and will not make the same mistakes again. I hate racism and i just couldn’t stop myself from hitting that girl. I have learned that violence solves nothing. Moreover, the girl has also been indicted for racist remarks, so she must pay some money to the state which surprised me. There must be a new law for racism where there are limits.
You asked me about life in prison. I hate it although most guards here like me. I am more quiet and calm than the others. Although they can treat us bad, they can also be nice.
I think that life out there is much better than this life in prison. I feel bad and can’t wait to come out of this unhappiness and missery. I am glad that I will be out of here next month and start over again. I can hardly wait.
Will you send the applications I sent you, so I can start to work immediately? I hope that I can get a job and that the crime I committed will not ruin my life. I miss life outside of the four walls.
You can all come at the weekend and visit me, these are free days for all prisoners.
Take care and I love you all very much. See you soon.
All my love, From your lovely daughter Brenda.
 

Der menes næppe "lovely daughter", men "loving daughter" 

 enfopaul,

Du har ødelagt hele ideen med at  meee 1 selv skulle finde ud af hvad der er forkert ved de markedede ord, blot fordi du absolut skulle vise hvor døøøøgti du er, men så dygtig er du heller ikke. 

Til lykke !!.

tak for hjælpen alle.

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 enfopaul,

Du har ødelagt hele ideen med at  meee 1 selv skulle finde ud af hvad der er forkert ved de markedede ord, blot fordi du absolut skulle vise hvor døøøøgti du er, men så dygtig er du heller ikke. 

Til lykke !!.

Stygotius

My apologies, I thought that this was a forum for students to discuss and find help with their english?  If I have misunderstood, then sorry!

EnfoPaul