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It was just yesterday that we heard the pop idol Michael Jackson was dead. it was so sad that you become totally upset. For me it was that when I heard that he had died so
I thought about just what happens here that's a lie that he is dead. But it was all true
That he was dead. When I was a small child I liked the music but when I heard for the first time Michael Jackson songs, so I thought shut up when he's good. When Michael Jackson came to Denmark so my cousin took me over to his concert but I was still a toddler. But I could still remember it a little when I saw his concert.
It was so cool to see him in real life that I do not know what to say it is reaching one's own idol. But I can also remember that took an operation which he then change colour from black to white. There were many people who said what he was going in but he was tired of his colour he change it. I think that he should keep his own colour to ever to change it to white. Since there was a case that he was a paedophile many
Newspapers wrote he was and many people think it's a lie that he was a paedophile.
It was written so much about it him that I think that it is a shame for him to say whom ever he is a paedophile or not. But when Michael Jackson talking to the dead
Much about him, how he died and it was an accident or not. But they took out of
He was killed by some pills he took were supporting him with the skin but it did not.
It did just the opposite it killed him. For me it was such that it was over with that we would listen to his songs one might say. But for me he will always be the king of pop of all.
tak på forhånd
Svar #1
07. februar 2010 af Carow (Slettet)
become > became
pas på med at bruge for meget 'that'! skriv hellere: It was sad for me hearing that he had past away, and I thought his dead had to be a lie.
the music > music (ikke noget 'the')
...og byt ordstilling om: when I heard Michael jacksons songs for the first time
jeg forstår ikke det med 'shut up'? mener du "Shut up - he's great!" ?
slet 'when' og 'over'
start IKKE med 'but' og og skriv hellere "I still remember a little from his concert..."
det var så det første... vil nogen tage resten? jeg skal egentlig selv skrive stil :-)
håber det hjalp
Svar #2
07. februar 2010 af madas (Slettet)
tak for hjælpen er der nogle der vil tage resten og rette mine fejl i min stil.
Svar #5
08. februar 2010 af Aguil (Slettet)
It was just yesterday that we heard the pop idol Michael Jackson was dead. It was so sad that you became totally upset. For me it was like that when I heard that he had passed awayy. At first I thought it was a lie, I couldn't believe it. But it was all true. When I was a little child I liked the music. The first time I heard him I told everyone to shut up. When Michael Jackson went to Denmark, my cousin took me to the concert. Even though I was a baby I can still remember a little of the experience.
It was so cool to see him in real life that I didn't know what to say. It's difficult to explain how weird it is reaching one's very biggest idol. But I can also remember the day I saw his skin had changed colour from black to white. Many people said he was tired of his colour and wanted to be pale. I think he should've kept his original skin tone. Afterwards the got accused for paedophilism. Many papers wrote about it, though many of his fans didn't believe it.
The whole thing was so dramatized, I thought it was a shame for him. He was killed by an overdoze of some pills he took to support his skin problems.
Some may never want to hear him anymore, but for me he will, above all, always be the king of pop!
Jeg har ingen anelse om hvad en "toddler" er? Det har jeg aldrig hørt om før. Du har nogle problemer, med dine ordstillinger og nogle af dine sætninger forstår jeg ikke meningen med.
NB: Du skriver ikke på tysk, der er ingen grund til at skrive navneord med stort :)
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