Ændring til førstepersonsfortæller

 Hello everyone!

Jeg skulle ændre denne korte tekst til førstepersonsfortæller, men vil gerne lige vide om det er lavet rigtigt :)

Original tekst:
After school, Jo attended the University of Exeter in Devon where she studied French. Her parents hoped that by studying languages, she would enjoy a great career as a bilingual secretary. But as Jo recalls, 'I am one of the most disorganised people in the world and, as I later proved, the worst secretary ever.' She claims that she never paid much attention in meetings because she was too busy scribbling down ideas. 'This is a problem when you are supposed to be taking the minutes of the meeting,' she says.

Ændret tekst:
After school, I attended the University of Exeter in Devon where I studied French. My parents hoped that by studying languages, I would enjoy a great career as a bilingual secretary. But as I recall, 'I am one of the most disorganised people in the world and, as I later proved, the worst secretary ever.' I claim that I never paid much attention in meetings because I was too busy scribbling down ideas. 'This is a problem when you are supposed to be taking the minutes of the meeting,' I say.

Thanks in advance!