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To be a fan is when people like something. -->( "Being a fan is liking something" lyder betydeligt bedre, men rent grammatisk tror jeg sådan set ikke der er noget galt med det andet.)It can be many things, it can rather(??udelad "rather") be a person, a group or a thing. I have chosen to write about being a fan of celebrities. I think it's funny that when somebody have been in a movie, people begins (to begin bøjes kun "begins" 3. pers. ental. people = 3. pers. flertal, derfor begin.) to get obsessed with them and wanna (rettelse: Want to. "wanna" er slang.) be like them, For example: before Miley Cyrus got on (the television show) Hannah Montana, she was just a little girl that nobody wanted to hang out with, and now the whole world wants to hang out with her, and many girls wanna be like her.(meget lang sætning) I don't know why it changes the way people see a person when they have been in a movie*(!!!) but I think it has something to do with respect, because you'll get respect for a person, who have the confidence to stand in front of a lot of people and just act or sing. And(Udelad And, intet and efter punktum, start med "I") I think that's why we wanna(intet wanna) be like them, because we wanna be like that(Rettelse: "this". that om en tidligere nævnt ligger lidt for tæt op af falsk komparativ) confident person, and maybe wanna look like them too. But(du skal heller ikke starte en sætning med but) sometimes we can get a little bit to obsessed, like(rettelse: "For example;", like = talesprog i denne sammenhæng) when Michael Jackson died, a lot of people did(rettelse: "comitted" da man ikke kan "gøre" selvmord, man begår det.") suicide because they wanted to be in heaven with him. I think that's crazy.  Those people who died because of him, were also trying to live his life. They dressed like him, had the same hair as him, and some went to the extreme where they got a surgery to look exactly like him. I do not think that's okay!(hvorfor udråbstegn? du bruger meget talesprog.) I think those people should realize that no matter how much they try, they will never be Michael Jackson. You will always be you! (øh? hvis du er over 9ende-klasses niveau er den her slags altså noget din lærer bare vil få spat af)

Personally I have never had a crazy obsession with somebody, I have only been inspired to do something, like I get inspired by (Rettelse: (...)to do something. For example i have once gotten inspired to get a style similar to the one of Mary-kate olsen." du bruger talesprog og en malplaceret apostrof.)- Mary-kate Olsen's style, and I get inspired by Tyra Banks to be a better person, and of-course i'm a fan of them, but i'm not having a obsession with them.(alt for lang sætning, men det er nogenlunde ordnet hvis du bruger punktum ved "something") I think it's important to could(udelad "could", det er en fordanskning og du oversætter direkte, det må man ikke) be a fan of somebody, and still live your own life.

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* = Jeg ville helt klart omformulere denne sætning til: "I don't know why the way people see a person change when they have been in a movie" - så vidt jeg husker er der en grammatisk regel om at tidsangivelser skal laves i enten starten eller slutningen af en sætning på engelsk. Dog, ikke at det har noget med grammatik at gøre, syntes jeg at det er en lidt tam overvejelse, prøv noget med, at berømthed = success = kan skabe success for en selv = ens egne interesser. evt?

If you're a fan, you are enthusiastic about a certain thing. It can be many things. It can be a person, a group or a specific product. I have chosen to write about being a fan of celebrities. I think it's funny that when somebody have been in a succesful movie, some people start being obsessed with them and want to be like them, For example: before Miley Cyrus got on Hannah Montana, she was just a little girl that nobody wanted to hang out with, and now the whole world wants to hang out with her, and many girls want to be like her. I don't know why it changes the way people see a person when they have been in a movie, but I think it has something to do with respect, because you'll get respect for a person, who has the confidence to stand in front of a lot of people and just act or sing. And I think that's why we want to be like them, because we want to be like that confident person, and maybe want to look like them too, but sometimes we can get a little bit too obsessed. For example when Michael Jackson died, a lot of people did suicide because they wanted to be in heaven with him. I think that's crazy. Those people who died because of him, were also trying to live his life. They dressed like him, had the same hair as him, and some went to the extreme where they got a surgery to look exactly like him. I do not think that's okay! I think those people should realize that no matter how much they try, they will never be Michael Jackson. You will always be you!

Personally, I have never had a crazy obsession with someone. I have only been inspired, for example, I got inspired by Mary-kate Olsen's style, and I got inspired by Tyra Banks to be a better person, and of course i'm a fan of them, but i'm not having a obsession with them. I think it's important to be able to be a fan of somebody, and still live your own life.
 

Jeg har rettet din Wanna, til "want to". (Fordi det er meget amerikanks at sige det, og de fleste lærere kan bedre lide du siger  "want to".) 

Ellers har jeg bare rettet nogle små ting.

#0, #2, #3.

Jeg er bange for at vi alle har begået dødsynden. (:

Linje 2 i #0 tekst, "I think it's funny that when"

her er der tale om præposition + that, det må man ikke, selvom vi gør det meget på dansk!

derfor skal det that væk.

#3 rettelser på dine rettelser (lol)

>meget lange sætninger. udover at følgende er en meget lang sætning er mangler du også at lave tidsangivelsen i starten eller slutningen:

"I don't know why it changes the way people see a person when they have been in a movie, but I think it has something to do with respect, because you'll get respect for a person, who has the confidence to stand in front of a lot of people and just act or sing"

det bliver noget forfærdeligt rod for de engelsk-sprogede at tidsangivelsen er sådan, i midten af det hele.

>Du starter også en sætning med and på linje 7. Det må man ikke.

>du skriver også "did suicide" det er stadigvæk ikke korrekt.

>"people went to extreme" da people er et kollektiv skal extreme i 3. pers. ental, derfor: "extremes"

 Jeg læste det meget hurtigt igennem, og havde godt lagt mæke til de lange sætninger, men det fokuserede jeg ikke på, da det er noget hun selv godt kan, det er nemlig bare x og bolle. Din rettelse er rigtigt god! og jeg havde ikke skrevet en rettelse hvis jeg så din. Angående, de meget lange sætninger, ja, så er jeg enig.

 Tusind tak for alle svarene! Det har virkelig hjulpet.

Men i skriver alle at mine sætninger er for lange, er der nogle forslag til hvordan man kunne forkorte dem lidt, altså jeg har prøvet selv at sidde og mikse lidt med det, men det kommer bare til at lyde forkert! 

- Og vil bare lige sige at jeg altså kun går i ottende (:

Jeg skriver engelsk som jeg gør nu da jeg gik i ottende, nu har jeg bare nogle begreber at bakke det op med.

Vi skal jo ikke gøre alting for dig, men brug min rettede version og prøv at sætte nogle punktummer, så ser jeg hvordan det ser ud (:

 Jeg vil rigtig gerne blive super god til engelsk. Jeg skal nemlig på High School efter niende, og der skal jeg selfølgelig have nogle gode karakter for at få lov til at tage afsted. 

Så hvordan er du egenligt blevet så god til engelsk, hvis du siger, at du var ligeså god til det, som du er nu? (: (nogle tips evt) ;P

 Her er den "nye" og rettede version (: 

To be a fan is when people like someyhing. It can be many things, it can be a person, a group or a thing. I have chosen to write about being a fan of celebrities. I think it's funny when somebody have been in a movie, people begin to get obsessed with them, and want to be like them, For example: before Miley Cyrus got on the TV-show Hannah Montana, she was just a little girl that nobody wanted to hang out with, and now the whole world wants to hang out with her, and many girls want to be like her too. I think it's because other girls realizes, that even if your a little or unpopular girl, you can still become successful. Some people just get's it wrong, because they starts to think, that they have to be like this certain person, to get success. For example when Michael Jackson died, a lot of people comitted suicide, because they wanted to be in heaven with him. I think that's crazy. Those people who died because of him, were trying to live his life. They dressed like him, had the same hair as him, and some went to the extremes where they got a surgery to look exactly like him. I do not think that's okay. I think those people should realize that no matter how much they try, they will never be Michael Jackson.

Personally, I have never had a crazy obsession with somebody, I have only been inspired to do something. For example i have once gotten inspired to get a style similar to the one of Mary-kate olsen, and I get inspired by Tyra Banks to be a better person, and of-course i'm a fan of them, but i'm not having a obsession with them. I think it's important to be a fan of somebody, and still live your own life.

#9

én ting: Ved at bruge det

brug af sproget kan være alt fra computerspil, chats, internet-debatter til film uden undertekster, etc. så man hører det engelske sprog på en korrekt måde og får det indkodet (til sidst kan du høre om selv meget komplicerede sætninger er rigtige). Det kan være den sjove del.

Men hvad der gav virkelig meget var at læse en hel masse, især var jeg helt tosset med de engelske versioner af Sherlock Holmes. De kan anbefales, især fordi du ikke vil forstå en masse af dem, så du får behov for ordbogs-søgninger, etc. men det giver super meget. Det kan også være du skal starte med noget nemmere for ikke at gå død i det, men det er op til dig.

#6,

"(...)det er nemlig bare x og bolle (...)"

Hvor kan den sætning bare misforstås hvis ikke man kender hele konteksten... :D :D

 Og så kan man spørge sig selv om hvordan du har fået rangen: "Professor" 

#13

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