avis artikel. stavefejl/andre fejl ??

He was near death! The boy Geoff was so lucky he wasn't eaten by a shark! He often went out to surf at the beach and has never seen a shark on the beach before, so he never imagined anything like that could happened to him.

On a sunny day Geoff was out surfing, like many times before. But this day was not like any other day. Things he had never expected happened that terrible day.On the beach some people saw a shark swim around a boy who lay on his surfboard. They did everything they could to get in touch with him- but it was obvious he was lying in his own thoughts, and had not seen the shark. Finally Geoff felt something was wrong and then he discovered the big dangerous shark! He was very afraid and said that the time stood still. Even when he was frozen with fear he managed to puss his surfboard into the big dangerous shark when it was about to attack him. In last minut he escaped. Geoff couldnt understand what had happened to him and that he was still alive. Doctors from the Hospital confirm that Geoff was lucky to escape from the big dangerous shark only with few scuffs.

Det var dem jeg lige umiddelbart kunne finde...

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 tusind tak!

Så lidt..  :D

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 vil du hjælpe med at rette det sidste ? 

On the beach some people saw a shark swim around a boy ( Geoff )who lay on his surfboard. They did everything could to get in touch with him- but it was obvious he was lying in his own thoughts, and not had seen the shark. Finally the boy Geoff felt something was wrong and then he discovered the big dangerous shark! He was very afraid and said that the time stood still. Even when he was frozen with fear he managed to puss his surfboard into the big dangerous shark when it was about to attack him. In last minut he escaped. Geoff couldnt understand what had happened to him and that he was still alive. People who were present at the beach when it all happened told us that they dig what they could to get in touch with Geoff. They shouted after him, but could not get in touch with him before he realized the shark. The people were very much in shock over no one had seen the shark before it almost was too late- even the lifeguard had seen the skark!There were other boys who were out shurfe at the same time as Geoff that they. Alexander saw it all! He claiming that he actually was quilty of Geoff not was eaten by the shark. Alexander threw namely his shufboard after the shark so Geoff could get away unharmed. Alexander was in shock but just glad no one was injuredWe interwiewed Geoff mom (Kate) and dad Tom, and ask how they felt about the whole situation. They said’’ We actually heard it on the radio, but all they said was that they dont know how Geoff had it since he had arrived at the hospital immediately for examination. So after they had said it on the radio we were very scared and feared the worst. We went to the hospital immediateley. In the Hospital we could not get to Geoff right away, so there we were so scared and thought we actually have lost our son. Fortunately it did not take long before Geoff came out and said he was OK. We were happy to see him safe and sound. Doctors from the Hospital confirm that Geoff was lucky to escape from the big dangerous shark, only with few scuffs. so we went home right away. We could not get Geoff to a interwiev unfortunately. 

Hmmm.. Kunne du eventuelt ikke rette selv i den til at begynde med? Du vil jo ikke lære noget af det hvis jeg rettede alle dine fejl.. Men så mange fejl er der dog heller ikke, så bare prøv og læs den højt for dig selv, så tror jeg tydeligt du vil kunne høre dem.. :)

 forstår godt hvad du mener, jeg har læst den igennem rigtigt mange gane men kan ikke finde flere

Okay, her er umiddelbart de få fejl jeg kan finde (men som jeg sagde før, indeholder teksten ikke så mange fejl, det er bare din tegnsætning, som du skal have en smule orden på).

On the beach some people saw a shark swim around a boy ( Geoff ) who lay on his surfboard. They did everything they could to get in touch with him - but it was obvious he was lying in his own thoughts, and had not seen the shark. Finally the boy Geoff felt something was wrong and then he discovered the big dangerous shark! He was very afraid and said that the time stood still. Even when he was frozen with fear he managed to push his surfboard into the big dangerous shark when it was about to attack him. In the last minut he escaped. Geoff couldnt understand what had happened to him and that he was still alive. People who were present at the beach when it all happened told us that they did what they could to get in touch with Geoff. They shouted at him, but could not get in touch with him before he realized the shark. The people were very much in shock about the fact that no one had seen the shark before it was almost too late - even the lifeguard had seen the shark! There were other boys who were out surfing at the same time as Geoff ( that they (forstår ikke hvorfor du har skrevet "that they"). Alexander saw it all! He claimed that he was actually quite amazed that Geoff was not eaten by the shark. Alexander threw namely his surfboard after the shark so Geoff could get away unharmed. Alexander was in shock but just glad no one was injured. We interwiewed Geoff's mom (Kate) and dad Tom, and asked how they felt about the whole situation. They said ’’We actually heard it on the radio, but all they said was that they didn't know how Geoff was since he had arrived at the hospital immediately for examination. So after they had said it on the radio we were very scared and feared the worst. We went to the hospital immediateley. In the Hospital we could not get to Geoff right away, so there we were so scared and thought that we had actually lost our son. Fortunately it did not take long before Geoff came out and said he was OK. We were happy to see him safe and sound. Doctors from the Hospital confirm that Geoff was lucky to escape from the big dangerous shark, only with few scuffs. so we went home right away. Unfortunately we could not get an interview with Geoff.

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 hej- jeg prøvede at læse det igennem igen da du sagde jeg skulle og de var de samme fejl jeg fandt som dig. tusind tak for hjælpen nu er den klar til aflevering! : )

Det var så lidt :)
Det vigtigste er bare at du lærer af dine fejl :) Men ellers er der intet problem i dit engelsk, så held og lykke fremover..

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