Engelsk, nogen som kan rette den?? :) skal sendes om 30 min.

A teenager is a person between thirteen and nineteen. The difficulty about teenagers and older people is, teenagers are going in the puberty and is not so focused on the school, as they have been before. When they are going in the puberty, they are thinking about sex, girls, boys, drugs, popularities and alcohol, this is unhealthy. The start of puberty is very hard and can change some stuffs. Teenager a very spoilt, they will have much of stuff, they are going to shop, going to parties, hanging out with friends, that is a kind of stuffs. Some teenagers is being pregnant, that is a kind of people who have sex in an early age. Is a big change of your life and a very big mistake, because they are young and cannot control their children. When I was a little boy, my mom told me that I was supposed to wearing all that cloths  she bought to me, and now I am not asking my mom to buy close to me, I buy it of my self. When I was in the puberty, its was hard for me, I could not even sleep, it was a hard time for me. When you are going to become a teenager, is going to be a challenge, it is going to affect your emotions, conflicts and it is going to affect much of your feelings, between your parents and you self. The teenager life is a new part of your life, and it is going to be instructive.
Your friends gonna be important, if you not have much friends it is going to be unhealthy, and that is not good. You are going to have many chooses between your friends and your parents, and you are going to lose more of your contact between your parents and your self. Like I have write in the beginning, about stuffs that cut probably change much of your life. If you are going to lose a important friend, example your best friend. And then you will have a bad feeling, you are sad. And you will not talk with some other people. It is not the same feeling like you have it before, Can your parents interfere in the problem, and invite that friend you have lost, to a piece of cake or something else. Something else teenager is going to be interested in, is the emotions for a girl or a boy, and then they are going to affect your school works, sports and other stuffs. Young teenagers going to be in love many times before they having sex, because they have a feeling, “Now I am big enough to having sex.” And that going to be a big mistake, they can’t manage it, they think it’s going to be easy.

Såvidt jeg kan se, er der en del fejl. Der er hvert fald noget at tage fat på ;)

Og vær sød at skrue lidt ned for "are going/is going"

Der er også en hel del med tegnsætningen

hej Gandolph, der hvor du har sat streger, kan du ikke rette det, da jeg virkelig er lost, og ikke ved hvad jeg skal skrive der, plz, og tak for en del af din hjælp :D?