Læs min engelsk stil igennem? vudere, Ret?

Jeg vil høre om der er nogen der vil læse min engelsk stil igennem, og sige deres mening.

I må meget gerne sige hvad jeg kunne skrive i stedet for. Vil være taknemlig over alt.



3. Chalk and cheese
A. What makes who you are?
What influences your personality?
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What makes me who I am? That’s a big question you can ask yourself. I don’t think Genes and the media has nothing in comment, to share how you are. Genes can involve that you’ll maybe have big nose, and small ears. But Genes can’t relate how you are. My personality can have something in comment with the genes, and also the media ex. If you are a boy, and you think you have a small penis, and you get teased in school, then it can break your personality. And why do you have a small penis, that’s because it’s in your genes. The media can tell a lot of shit in the newspaper or gossip papers, and if they are lying about you, so everyone can read it, it’ll crash your personality.

I believe Family, Friends and surroundings makes me to who I am. If I didn’t lived in Denmark, maybe I have been a gangster, pusher or a beggar. Family is the biggest part of all other subjects who makes you who you are. You need a family, so you have someone, who can tell you what’s right and wrong and what are left and right. You need a family to support you in all decisions you take. If you grow up with a family with low financial circumstances, and they just let you run in the middle of the night, and don’t tell you what are left and right. Then you destroy the child completely, because he doesn’t have a family who feed him the love he needed, or they didn’t respect or helped him. So I think family is the most important of all subjects that makes who you are.
Surroundings are a very dangerous subject, because it can change a person in no time, if he/she got the right things to make a boring night, to a wild night. There are different against Friends and Surroundings, you can not trust a stranger even it’s a Male or female you just met to party, because you don’t know their backgrounds. Friends can you trust, because you know who they are, and they are supporting you if you need it. Surroundings are just some people you’ve met through other people, and you can’t put your trust to them, because suddenly they’ll put something in your drink, and bang you’ll go crazy, and they got control over you. That’s why I think surroundings are a very dangerous subject, but it can also be positive, you can also meet people, you will hang up with the rest of your life.

I have an example with a girl; we went to the same school same class. It was in the middle of 8 grades, she began to act strange, like she was uncomfortable with everything and everyone. I though it were some problem at home, but then I could not understand, why she began to dress different, it was sexy close, not black close or stuff like that, just sexy very short close.
I saw her flirting around with some guys, who were kick out of schools and stuff like that.
She began to play truant, and took down town to her friends in stet. One time she arrived in school, and she got a lot attention, because her eyes were completely red, her hair was messed up. She looked like shit. But we figured that she was on drugs, and she got kicked out of the school. I was wondering why that quiet girl could destroy her own life in no time. She did not talk much in the classroom, and she was just doing her homework everyday, and suddenly she change from a normally quiet girl to a crack abuser. I think to day it’s because she was not very strong, and she have might be afraid to say no to the people she didn’t even know, I think she was happy when she was together with them, because she got attention and complements. That is what can happen to a person, if she/he began to go with people she doesn’t really know.

I will consider Friends and family close, because you can consider a very good friend as a part of the family. Friends are very important for me to have, because they can give me, what my parents can’t give. It’s like they are my second family if you know what I mean, it’s like I have a primary and a second family. My primary families raise me with manner and feed me with family love, and teach me what is right and wrong. My second family gives me experience, friendship and thousand other things. It’s wonderful to have both families, because what the primary family can’t give me, the second family can give me, and reverse.
I think it’s important to have the right friends, or you can end up like the girl I told you about.
Right friends are someone you can trust and have a good social network with. Friends give you the possibility to enlarge yourself on many different methods.

Another subject I’ll remind you about is experience. I don’t think experience have anything to how you are. Experience could be on a holiday, but it can’t be useful. But Friends and experience can be used together, and create an experience you and your friends never will forget. You can have memorised for your childhood, and some flashbacks, but it can’t change or make a different in the way you are.
Family, Friends and surroundings is the most important in life.