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fed skrift=fejl

Throughout the last decades lack of communication has developed into a way of living for many people. Our society contians certian ideas and views about the perfekt familiy. How the perfekt family are supposed to drees, behave, eat ,enjoy life and so on. Sit down and think for a moment, does your family behave a certian way, just to please the surrounding world? Think of your children. Does they have a stabile and joyfull relationship in between? And do you as a mother manage to establish a good, solid and safe place to fall for your children?
What do you as a good mother do when the appeared facade starts to crack and your family is torn between?
We live in a period that interferes with the traditional family structure and makes individuals lonely and materialistic, because identity is a fanciful concept that is hard to find.
The short story “The Dress” written by Julia Daring brings up some interesting subjects in its themes and symbolism.

How the perfekt family are supposed to drees (dress?), behave, eat ,enjoy life and so on.

Does (do) they have a stabile and joyfull relationship in between?

Ellers virkelig godt skrevet!

Det er efter min mening en super god indledning du har fået skrevet dig. Spændende fyldt med spørgsmål der bliver besvaret igennem din stil. Det fungerer godt for mig. Thumbs up.

Lige et par gramatiske fejl rettelser:

certian = certain

perfekt = perfect

drees = dress

Held og lykke!

Throughout the last decades lack of communication has developed into a way of living for many people. Our society contians certian ideas and views about the perfect familiy. How the perfect family are supposed to dress, behave, eat ,enjoy life and so on. Sit down and think for a moment, does your family behave a certian way, just to please the surrounding world? Think of your children. Does they have a stabile and joyfull relationships in between? And do you as a mother can manage to establish a good, solid and safe place  for your children?
What do you as a good mother do when the appeared facade starts to crack and your family is torn between?
We live in a period that interfere with the traditional family structure and makes individual lonely and materialistic, because identity is a fanciful concept that is hard to find.
The short story “The Dress” written by Julia Daring brings up some interesting subjects in its themes and symbolism.

Comment:  I think it is okay but some other words are senseness.

Super :)

Men synes I at indledningen belyser emnet? Fordi jeg er bange for at jeg har flere emner igang i indledingen..

Tak for rettelserne og fordi I gider at kigge på det :)

Ja jeg synes det belyser emnet fint.

Den kommer godt omkring det hele, og jeg synes spørgsmålene er gode.

Plat, clichéefyldt og dårligt argumenteret indledning - og så fyldt med dårlige eller direkte forkerte formuleringer! Prøv at vise, at du virkelig kan LÆSE og FORTOLKE novellen, det vil sige selve teksten, hvis du vil imponere din lærer. Det der kan da kun irritere en læser. Today . . . bla bla bla: Demonsterer blot, at du ingen anelse har om, hvordan verden så ud før 1990.