Lille rettelse til historiens slutning

Hej. Jeg har læst en engelsk historie, hvor jeg så selv skulle finde på en slutning. Jeg vil rigtig gerne have I kigger denne historie igennem for evt. fejl og retter det. 

Her er slutningen af historien:

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I felt bad about myself. After I heard about the situation that Brenda's mother had found out our little secret, I had suddenly not desire to be in the hotel room with Brenda. I didn’t know quite what to say. But I understood it not completely . I asked her why her mom was so mad about it. As if they were the first young people who have slept together. Her answer was really surprising. The condition was, that she was religious, and had broken one of the rules, namely that one should not sleep with someone else, before you were married.. Therefore was her mother upset and sad. Of course there were also many other parents, who would be upset, but that they also are religious make it just worse. Brenda and her family had simply got bad reputation around them. And that her father was a businessman, make it not better, because there were many, who were acquainted with him. She seemed very sad, when she told me that. I was very surprised, when I didn't know that she and her family was deeply religious. She had never told me that before. I gave her the offer. If she would, we could run away together. Away from America to Dubai on my bill. But she couldn’t accept it. She had a guilty conscience. She wanted to go home and pray for forgiveness, and that was what she did.

  She knocked on the front door, but first her mother would not open. Since she opened, was it not with a friendly tone she talked to Brenda. ”What will you now? You've already broken one half of my heart, are you here to broken the other also?” she said angry. ”Mother, I am here to pray for forgiveness. I’m very sorry about that happened. Please forgive me. I will do anything, just not to be mad at me. I will never do it again,” Brenda said. ”Mad?  Mad is nothing compared to that I will throw you out of the house. You have betrayed us and our religion, and I will never forgive you. Go away!" said his mother with a mixture of sad and angry facial expression, before she closed the door.” Brenda had a moment going to commit suicide. She had not experienced anything like it, and that one's own family had turned their backs against one, so life was not worth living anymore. How should she live now?  I had completely the entire conversation between Brenda and her mother. It was a pity for her and I should do something. I went over to her and lies my hand on her back and comforted her.  ”John. I’m very sad, but when my family is indifferent I am too. I take with you,” she said. ”It’s okay,” I said. ---------------------------------------------------