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Lille engelsk stil
19. april 2005 af
Peter L (Slettet)
Det her er første del af min engelske stil.. håber der er en der lige vil kigge den i gennem.. MV Peter
When I walked of the quay and into the village of Schull, it all looked like a deserted ghost village where nobody lived. After a short research I found out why it looked like it did. It was the famine which ravaged the village. The famine was caused by a disease which had destroyed all the potatoes, and it was not only the crop it had destroyed, but also peoples provisions. This vegetable is the most eaten by the Irishmen, and they ate average 14 Ib. a day. So the potato gave them all the sustenance they needed.
When I had seen some of the cabins inside, I saw things that should had been in a very scary nightmare and not in the real world. The smell of all the putrefy meat was so bad, that I more than one time was on the edge of throwing up. People were laying like living skeletons, stomachs swollen and some half-eaten by rats, dogs and cats. Some children had jaws so distended that they could not speak, it was really horrible. Other people were so enervated that not even rats would eat them, and they were alive.
Believe me all the suffering I saw on this trip, will always be on my mind.
When I walked of the quay and into the village of Schull, it all looked like a deserted ghost village where nobody lived. After a short research I found out why it looked like it did. It was the famine which ravaged the village. The famine was caused by a disease which had destroyed all the potatoes, and it was not only the crop it had destroyed, but also peoples provisions. This vegetable is the most eaten by the Irishmen, and they ate average 14 Ib. a day. So the potato gave them all the sustenance they needed.
When I had seen some of the cabins inside, I saw things that should had been in a very scary nightmare and not in the real world. The smell of all the putrefy meat was so bad, that I more than one time was on the edge of throwing up. People were laying like living skeletons, stomachs swollen and some half-eaten by rats, dogs and cats. Some children had jaws so distended that they could not speak, it was really horrible. Other people were so enervated that not even rats would eat them, and they were alive.
Believe me all the suffering I saw on this trip, will always be on my mind.
Svar #1
19. april 2005 af Mocca Jimmy (Slettet)
Hej. Det ser generelt fint ud, så her følger bare et par småfejl: "the people's" i stedet for "peoples" i linie 10; "...that I more than one time..." ville måske lyde bedre som "....that I more than once...";og i sidste sætning skal der sættes et komma efter "Believe me" ;).
Det er hvad jeg umiddelbart kan se. Det kan være nogle har andre forslag/rettelser..?
Det er hvad jeg umiddelbart kan se. Det kan være nogle har andre forslag/rettelser..?
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