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HJÆLP TIL RETTELSE AF MINI OPAVE

03. februar 2012 af karsten165 (Slettet) - Niveau: 10. klasse

Hej er der nogen der gider og kigge på det jeg har skrevet ved godt det ikke er så godt skrevet, men gider i og kigge på den og bare ret de fejl i lige gider fordi det ville hjælpe med en hel del på forhånd tak :) hilsen Karsten

Weapons:
In the Vietnam War they used many different kind of weapons example napalm bomb, knife, shell, machine guns and many other weapons.
Here under can we see nearly all the weapons the 2 teams used

Vietnam The Allies
Knife M1 Karabin
sword M16 automatic rifle
Shells Shells
SKS Simonov - Karabin Shellthrower
AK - 47 Guns hell
Soviet shellthrower M-60 machine gun
Rocketdrive missile 155mm haubits

 

Napalm bomb:

in the Vietnam Wars used the allies much napalm bomb they throw the bombs in the forest where all the Vietnams Soldier was so they burn up into they died. Napalm is made by petrol and the matter napthen fat lilac palmimat and then you combine this things will it make a sticky substance. In the War was there throwing 8 million napalm bombs what is 4 times as much as they used in whole World War 2.

Agent Orange: 

They used also something they called Agent orange that was a poison some destroy all what it touch example destroy it forest and people. Forest because all tree died if Agent Orange touch. People because if that touch them will theirs children be deformed and it is sooner good for someone. After they have used it can Vietnam people not hide them for the Allies soldiers. About 3 millions of people was invited by Agent Orange and that says 500.000 people is born deformed. About 17,8 % of all forest in Vietnam is also be infection by Agent Orange. The Allies used also a thing there are called Agent Blue is was kind of Agent Orange but they used Agent Blue to rice mark and other crop so Vietnams people not cut get some food they cut eat.

Transport:

The Allies used a helicopter there are called Huey. They used Huey to all things example fight, ambulance and many other things. There are made 10.000 Huey but in the Vietnam War be there destroy 5086 Huey. Today user they still Huey to many different things.

Teams:
There were 2 teams in the Vietnam War anticommunist government and communist government. On the anticommunist government site was Southvietnam, USA, Southkorea, Thailand, Australia, New Zealand, the Philippines. And on the communist government was Northvietnam, NLF/Viet Cong, China, the Soviet Union, Northkorea.  

Leader:

There was many leaders under the Vietnam War some of the leaders for anticommunist governments was Lyndon B Johnson, William Westmoreland, Richard Nixon, Creighton Abrams, Nguyen Van  Thieu. And some of the leaders for communist government were Le Duan, Nguyen Chi Thanh, Vo Nguyen Giap, Van Tien Dung, Tran Van Tra.

People there die:

There die very many people In the Vietnam War. Both innocents and soldiers die. Many of them there die were innocents.
On the anticommunist government team was Southvietnam and they had 230.000 died and 300.000 wounded, and  USA had  58.209 died and 153.303 wounded, and southvietnam had 5000 died and 11.000 wounded,  and Australia had 512 died and 2.400 wounded, and New Zealand had 37 died and 187 wounded.
So on the communist government site was Northvietnam/NLF and they had 1.100.000 died and circa 600.000 wounded, and China and they had 1.100 died and 4.200 wounded.
It was only loss for the army.
For the Vietnam died 1-3 millions of innocent people that was really many of innocent people there die. For Cambodia die 300.000-1.000.000 people. And for Laos die 70.000-250.000 people. So in the Vietnam War die really many innocent people there not had anything meet the War to do.


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Svar #1
03. februar 2012 af 123434 (Slettet)

Jeg har rettet lidt, prøv at kig på det her. Har svært ved at rette tekster så

They also used

Vietnam people cannot

Many leaders during The Vietnam War

South Vietnam

It was only a lost

The allies also used

Prøv evt. at læs lidt om præpositioner samt biords placering.

 

 


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03. februar 2012 af patrickbc (Slettet)

Jeg er ikke specielt god til engelsk (10 med pil nedad) men her er lige nogle stave fejl som jeg tror skal rettes:

(Kapitel: Napalm bombs)

Start med stort.

Der var kun en Vietnam krig ikke?.

Jeg ville sige "a lot of" i stedet for much.

throw -> throwed.

into -> until.

And then you -> And when you.

In the war was 8 million napalm bombs throwed.

what -> which.

 

(Kapitel Agent Orange)

used also -> also used.

that -> it.

some -> which.

forests.

all tree -> all the trees.

touch -> touched them.

that touch -> it touched.

will theirs children -> would their children.

After they have used it can Vietnam people not hide them for the Allies soldiers -> After they had used it could the people of Vietnam not hide from the Allies soldiers.

FJERN: of.

forests.

is also be infection -> was also infected.

is was kind of Agent Orange -> it was a kind of Agen Orange.

rice fields.

Vietnams people not cut get some food they cut eat -> The people of Vietnam couldn't get any food to eat.

 

Så gad jeg ikke mere. HUSK AT SKRIVE I SAME TID OG PAS PÅ KOMMA FEJL.

Håber du får en god karakter.

Patrick

 


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