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Mondag morning sitting James Jackson in his office. All of a sudden, called telephone. “Hallo” says James Jackson, “who is it”? “My name is Jolly Winter, there is a girl, and she has been killed in the house. James Jackson asked “Do you have see the person, there has killed the girl?” No I dont know. After that, stretch Jame Jackson go to, it house, where it killed girls is there in. Then he was reach to girls home, open he doormat and go in. He step in to one big living room, and look first at there lie blood, so go he a little further. Until, then can he see one knife on floor. On bricklayer can he see blood then it have pesticide over all on bricklayer. Suddenly see he also one telephone need on floor, and it can be to girl have attempt to, send for help since police it, there stand 114 in she`s telephone. Thereafter can he see girl recumbent on floor. Man can see on she´s face at she have cry for very, at she`s eye stay totally reed. She’s clothes was filled whit blood,  at man not can see what she  have take on. Jame Jackson can also in det smallest see at she have little and blue feel in she´s body. And det read on at murder have give she more kick and thrashing for at she can stall still. In this affair can there be mistake if, one girl, and two boys. The girl name is Jennifer Lizzie, the boys some then only, name is Oliver Collin and then other Marc James. Ground to Oliver Collin killed girl was, at the girls have owe Oliver 2.000 crown. Jame Jackson found quick affair by at he take over to crime scene and asked if people, if they hear some thunder off girl, if they have see murder go out of the house after at he have killed the girl.