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Hej, 

Jeg skal beskrive skrivestilen i nedenstående uddrag fra en roman. Dette skal jeg gøre med fx hensyn til ordvalg og sætningsopbygning. 

Jeg synes dog teksten er lidt forvirrende, grundet de ukorrekte sammentrækninger osv, så ville høre hvad i evt mente?

Er kommet frem til, som sagt, at der er ukorrekte sammentrækning, fx "the phone'd rung..". 

Derudover har jeg sagt at en sproglige stil er meget ligefrem. 

Her er uddraget:

Do not set foot in my office. That’s Dad’s rule. But the phone’d rung twenty-five times. Normal people give up after ten or eleven, unless it’s a matter of life or death. Don’t they? Dad’s got an answering machine like James Garner’s in The Rockford Files with big reels of tape. But he’s stopped leaving it switched on recently. Thirty rings, the phone got to. Julia couldn’t hear it up in her converted attic ’cause ‘Don’t You Want Me?’ by Human League was thumping out dead loud. Forty rings. Mum couldn’t hear ’cause the washing machine was on berserk cycle and she was hoovering the living room. Fifty rings. That’s just not normal. S’pose Dad’d been mangled by a juggernaut on the M5 and the police only had this office number ’cause all his other ID’d got incinerated? We could lose our final chance to see our charred father in the terminal ward.
So I went in, thinking of the bride going into Bluebeard’s chamber after being told not to.

Håber at der er nogen, der vil hjælpe. 

På forhånd tak