engelsk fantasi opgave.

S'gerne, tatlim.

Hej! Kan I sige mig hvis der er nogle stavefejl eller grammatiske fejl i denne opgave?

I looked out of (lose this preposition, darl) the window and saw a green creature (<– punktum efter sidste ord i en sætning, tak) I screamed. "Shh," said the green creature (<–se nærmere på ordstillingen), "follow me and I will lead you to a precious treasure." (Eller: The green creature hushed me and said, "Follow me and I will ... .")

I was speechless and saw the green creature climbed op (<– "Danglish") on the roof. I followed  the green creature. I saw a green closet (indsæt komma) and the green creature jumped in to (ét ord) it. I in stepped into the closet and closed the door. I couldn’t see the green creature. But I saw some light and walked against towards it.

I came into reached a forest (indsæt komma) and there I was found myself surrounded by the most remarkable creatures .Men with there (forskel mellem they're, their og there?) lower body like a horst (horse, no doubt – but the creatures you're alluding to are called centaurs), mermaids, and fairy’s (<– nej, dette er ikke flertal) and boys with fish heads and human body’s (dette er heller ikke flertal).

I saw the green creature again. "Come with me," said the green creature it said, "I will follow take you to the treasure." The boy (What boy? One of the boys?) followed the green creature. They came (reached? arrived at?) to a tree stump  with a sword stuck in it. "If you can pull the sword out, off the stump you will become our king," the creature said, "and we will fulfill (stavebøf)  your wishes."

After 12 twelve trials (trial = rettergang; try = forsøg. Du kan også overveje "upon his twelfth attempt".) the boy got the sword out off the stump succeeded in his endeavour. The creatures cheered and said, "You are our new king." And the boy is still king in the fantasy world today to this day.

Din tegnsætning sejler fuldstændigt. Hvorfor insisterer du forresten på (flere) mellemrum foran punktum og komma (nu har jeg ryddet op i det)? Jeg er desuden "lost" i selve historien; er der tre personer i alt (jeg-fortæller, dreng og det der grønne væsen)?