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26. februar 2006 af sdj (Slettet)

Hej! Håber nogen vil rette de værste fejl i denne stil??

The play Blood Brothers is a description of, what happens, if identical twins are going to be separate immediately after birth and grow up in different social stratum. It is (med andre ord(hvordan siger man det???)) the classical conflict: inheritance contra environment. The biological mother become persuaded by her employer to put out for adoption one of the twins, Eddie, but keep the other, Mickey. Beforehand she is unsupported mother to 7 children and has not advice to keep both of the boys. Immediately after she become sack from the job as charwoman.

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Svar #1
26. februar 2006 af Ralphi (Slettet)

The play, Blood Brothers, is a description of what happens if identical twins are going to be seperated immediately after brith and grow up in different social Stratum? hvad mener du? er det ikke omstændigheder??? jeg ville bruge circimstances. In other words, it's the classical conflict: inheritance contra environment. The biological mother became persuaded by her employer to have one of her twins, Eddie adopted. However, she kept her other child, Mickey. Jeg ved ikke hvad du mener med det sidste....? men du roder lidt rundt i tiderne... :)

Svar #2
26. februar 2006 af sdj (Slettet)

Okay, hehe! Er ikke så god til det:(
Men hvis du venter 2 sek kan jeg da lige skrive den danske version:P

Svar #3
26. februar 2006 af sdj (Slettet)

Skuespillet Blood brothers er en beskrivewlse af, hvad der sker, hvis enæggede tviliinger skilles ad umiddelbart efter fødslen og vokser op i forskellige sociale lag. Det er med andre ord den klassiske konflikt: arv kontra miljø. Den biologiske mor bliver af sin afbejdsgiver overtalt til at bortadoptere den ene tviling Eddie, men beholder den anden, Mickey. Hun er i forvejen enlig mor til 7 og har ikke råd til at beholde begge drenge. Umiddelbart efter bliver hun fyret fra sit arbejde som rengøringskone.

Svar #4
26. februar 2006 af sdj (Slettet)

Ingen der kan hjælpe??

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Svar #5
26. februar 2006 af Romulus (Slettet)

Jeg har taget udgangspunkt i #1 og foretaget nogle smårettelser.

The play, Blood Brothers, is a description of what happens if identical twins are seperated immediately after birth and grow up in different social strata. In other words, it's the classical conflict: inheritance contra environment. The biological mother became persuaded by her employer to have one of her twins, Eddie adopted. However, she kept her other child, Mickey. Immediately after this she was sacked from her job as cleaning lady.

(synes "clarwoman" er MEGET forældet og det bruges ALDRIG i daglig tale).

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Svar #6
26. februar 2006 af girl123 (Slettet)

The play Blood Brothers is a description of, what happens, if identical twins are going to be separate immediately after birth and grow up in different social environments . It is with other words the classical conflict: inheritance contra environment. The biological mother became persuaded by her employer to have one of her twins, Eddie adopted, but kept the other twin, Mickey. Beforehand she is an unsupported mother to 7 children and has not afford to keep both of the boys. Immediately after she got fired
from the job as a chairwoman .

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Svar #7
26. februar 2006 af girl123 (Slettet)

as a charwoman ,mener jeg.

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Svar #8
26. februar 2006 af Romulus (Slettet)

Ups... kan se jeg trykkede forkert i #5.

clarwoman --> charwoman

Sætningen, jeg overså:
She was already an unsupported mother to seven kids and couldn't afford keeping both boys

Svar #9
26. februar 2006 af sdj (Slettet)

Tak for de mange gode rettelse! Det var godt med lidt hjælp og pænt af jer i gad hjælpe:P

Svar #10
26. februar 2006 af sdj (Slettet)

Har lavet en lille fortsættelse! Håber nogen vil hjælpe med denne også?

the boys grows up, and becomes good friends, though withouth knowing they are twíns. As they get older, their ways seperates for a while. mickey gets a unskilled job at a factory; Eddie gets an education,
and becomes the director for the factory, that he has inherited by his father.vMickey is getting jaloux and bitter, Eddie is getting helpfull and friendly.
their years of growth makes it possible for them to understand each other.When Mickey gets supecious about, that his wife, Linda, has an affair whith Eddie,the story speeds up and finds a tragic ending.

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Svar #11
08. juni 2006 af jammal (Slettet)

Husk: Their ways seperate *

- mickey gets an unskilled

- their year of growth make*

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Svar #12
08. juni 2006 af jammal (Slettet)

their years*

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