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A good night’s sleep is a story with a main character whose name is George Lockhart. He lives in a modern city, where he has to deal with all the problems in the modern society.

George Lockhart is a teacher of Communication and General Studies, he teaches first year students. Because of his teacher gene, he can’t help himself from wanting to help the young girl who’s sitting outside on his doormat. He asks her questions about things he think can make her live better, “ But surely there must be somewhere you can go – a hostel, maybe?” So even though he doesn’t know her, he cares about her. Therefore is he also ready to let her sleep in his sons bet for the Night.
George Lockhart is a divorced man; he has a son called Ben, who he only sees in the weekends.
Lockhart is missing having a wife, and he can’t stop thinking about her:
“ He punched the pillows and rearranged his legs and his arms. It was one of those expensive beds, scientifically designed for the sleepless, but single. He tried not to think of Elaine, his ex-wife, sleeping in their old, comfortable double bed – alone? – and tried not to start worrying about what to do with Ben, their son, when he took him for the weekend…”
this tells us some things about Lockhart, he’s missing his wife, he’s having sleepless problems since he got divorced, and the noise around his apartment on the 3rd floor of a tenement building doesn’t make it better, and I don’t think he is used to spend time with his son, so it’s a new thing for him, and maybe that’s why it’s worrying him what to do with Ben.
Obviously he doesn’t have a very exciting life, and it appears, that one day is just taking the other. He also has a low self-esteem, because he has a habit to apologize to people, even though he hasn’t done anything wrong, ex. When the neighbours chase the girl away, he says he found himself apologizing again.
It seems like the world is worrying him as it is. Everyday he teaches in problems of society, and how is he supposed not to get affected, by what he tells? Maybe that is why he actually makes a difference, and starts talking to the “junkie” sleeping in front of his door. He feels pity for her, unlike everyone else.
You can’t say that Lockhart has been lucky with his neighbours. An old guy with a limp is living upstairs, he’s an alcoholic, and Lockhart has to listen to his drunken song. The neighbours who live beside Lockhart, is a young couple, they are always having disputes where they break glass and slams with the doors, and then when make up in the beds. Lockhart finds it irritating, because the walls are so attentive. But I think this is a normal problem among neighbours. Because when you live so close up at each other, and you can hear almost everything what happens in the other apartments, so in some way it would be irritating in some point. We all know it from our own life, how people can irritate you if you go together to long.

The greatest theme in the text is modern city life, and on of the things which belong in such a society is poverty. The girl, Lockhart talks with outside his apartment is poor, and she doesn’t have a place to stay, ‘cause the kick her out of the hostel. Poverty is a very sad thing, which we unfortunately can’t do anything about. We can pay some money to them, but would it help? I don’t think so, because they hardly ever have the will to turn their life into something nice. The girl in the text is a good ex. at this, she wouldn’t receive help from Lockhart, she just wanted to die, and when he offers her a bed for the night, she thinks he would hurt her, or do something with her.
The ending is very open, because Lockhart know he wouldn’t have a good night’s sleep after all that he has experienced this night, but before he goes to sleep he hears the neighbours are coming home, and they are acting like normally. But this isn’t the open part of the ending, “ Then he heard it again, against the door of his flat, soft but insistent.” It was this sound which got him out of the bed in the beginning, and I think it’s the girl who has changed her mind, I think she has realised that Lockhart as the sympathy man he is, only wanted to giver roof over her head for the night.

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A good night’s sleep is a story with a main character whose name is George Lockhart. He lives in a modern city, where he has to deal with all the problems in the modern society.

George Lockhart is a teacher of Communication and General Studies, he teaches first year students. Because of his teacher gene, he can’t help himself from wanting to help the young girl who’s sitting outside on his doormat. He asks her questions about things he thinkS can make her live better, “ But surely there must be somewhere you can go – a hostel, maybe?” So even though he doesn’t know her, he cares about her. Therefore is he also ready to let her sleep in his sons bet for the Night.
George Lockhart is a divorced man; he has a son called Ben. BUT HE ONLY SEES HIM IN THE WEEKENDS.
Lockhart MISS having a wife, and he can’t stop thinking about her:
“ He punched the pillows and rearranged his legs and his arms. It was one of those expensive beds, scientifically designed for the sleepless, but single. He tried not to think of Elaine, his ex-wife, sleeping in their old, comfortable double bed – alone? – and tried not to start worrying about what to do with Ben, their son, when he took him for the weekend…”
This tells us some things about Lockhart, he’s missing his wife, he’s having SLEEPING problems since he got divorced, and the noise around his apartment on the 3rd floor of a tenement building doesn’t make it better. I don’t think he is used to spend time with his son, so it’s a new thing for him, and maybe that’s why it’s worrying him what to do with Ben.
Obviously he doesn’t have a very exciting life, and it appears, that one day is just taking the other. (OMFORMULER SIDSTE DEL AF SÆTNING) He also has a low self-esteem, because he has a habit to apologize to people, even though he hasn’t done anything wrong, ex. When the neighbours chase the girl away, he says he found himself apologizing again.
It seems like the world is worrying him as it is. Everyday he teaches in problems of society, BUT how is he supposed not to get affected, by what he tells? Maybe that is why he actually makes a difference, and starts talking to the “junkie” sleeping in front of his door. He feels pity for her, unlike everyone else.
You can’t say that Lockhart has been lucky with his neighbours. An old guy with a limp is living upstairs, he’s an alcoholic, and Lockhart has to listen to his drunken song. The neighbours who live beside Lockhart, is a young couple, they are always having disputes where they break glass and slams with the doors, and then when make up in the beds. Lockhart finds it irritating, because the walls are so attentive. But I think this is a normal problem among neighbours. When you live so close at each other, you can hear almost everything what happens in the other apartments. I guees, that it in some way would be quite irritating. We all know it from our own life, how people can irritate you if you spend to much time together.

The greatest theme in the text is modern city life, and one of the things which belong in such a society is poverty. The girl, Lockhart talks with outside his apartment is poor, and she doesn’t have a place to stay, ‘cause theY kick her out of the hostel. Poverty is a very sad thing, which we unfortunately can’t do anything about. We COULD pay some money to them, but would it help? I don’t think so, because they hardly ever have the will to turn their life into something nice. The girl in the text is a good ex. at this. She wouldn’t receive help from Lockhart, she just wanted to die, and when he offers her a bed for the night, she thinks he would hurt her, or do something with her.
The ending is very open, because Lockhart knowS he wouldn’t have a good night’s sleep after all that he has experienced this night, but before he goes to sleep he hears the neighbours are coming home, and they are acting like THEY ALLWAYS DO. But this isn’t the open part of the ending, “ Then he heard it again, against the door of his flat, soft but insistent.” It was this sound which got him out of the bed in the beginning, and I think it’s the girl who has changed her mind, I think she has realised that Lockhart as the sympathy man he is, only wanted to giver roof over her head for the night.



Bare lige nogle få rettelser. Jeg har skrevet nogle med stort, resten er sætninger, jeg har omformuleret. Håber, du kan bruge det til noget.

Ellers er det en udemærket stil.

det du har skrevet med stort er det fejlene?

Nej, det er det der rigtigt skal stå.
Der er desuden et stykke, hvor jeg har omformuleret en del sætninger.

insistent.” It was this sound which got him out of the bed in the beginning, and I think it’s the girl who has changed her mind, I think she has realised that Lockhart as the sympathy man he is, only wanted to offer her a place to sleep for the night.

- Lige en sidste ting.

okay mange tak ;D

Så lidt da. Skulle det være en anden gang.